Reviewed By: VendettaTheory [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2005 10:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey congrats on your first story man. You told me to be kind so I'm going to offer you some tips one writer to another. First add some descriptive paragraphs to your story. As of now its all dialouge. I had the same problem when I started writing. Take a paragraph to describe the dream, a paragraph to describe your characters, establish a setting. In chap. 2 you drop the reader into dialouge without telling them where the characters are at. Keep writing dude! The story has potential in it.
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