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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 19:27 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sighs* That was beautiful. Perfect. Poor Goku suffered so much after seeing something he wanted but couldn't have. He couldn't be angry - I don't think he is capable of staying angry, but the hurt was so evident in this. I liked his line about everyone choosing him - when he kissed Vegeta again it was like he was the one making the choice. Vegeta is such a lonely person - I love the engraving on the gravestone. It fits him - a proud declaration, but hidden by the secrets of his language. I'm so happy you ended up with the Saiyans together - anything else at this point would have been too painful for them both. I knew for sure it would happen the instant Vegeta IT'd to Goku - like he was drawn to him. I'm glad I had a part in inspiring this beautiful piece. (And lucky GB - getting Goku if only temporarily.) Since I still have room... Bulma was a little too saintly, but she was being remembered by people who loved her, so I guess it was only natural. You didn't bash Chichi! *hugs* It had to hurt her terribly to think Goku didn't really need her - leaving so often and so long. At least he realized it and tried to make her feel better, although I got the feeling he thought more of Bulma. Maybe because her death was more recent and the wounds were still fresh. *sighs again* I loved this. I'm glad Goku got his turn - and Vegeta. *g*
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Reviewed By: Elenek * not logged in* On: March 28, 2005 19:15 PST
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Oh **** You!!! I cried the entire way through. -El-
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Reviewed By: Vegeta's Mate~not loging in~ On: March 28, 2005 19:01 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a truly beautiful story. I love how you ended it and I like that you put Bulma's letter to Vegeta in at the end. Alot of authors wouldn't bother writting a letter like that unless they were definately putting it somewhere in their story. Very remarkable way to end it...or is it really ended? Do you plan to continue and write of their travels or leave it as you have, beautifully ended? Please continue writing as you have a way with words that captures your readers and draws them into your stories.
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Reviewed By: TT On: March 26, 2005 08:04 PST
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This goku is so different,so sad
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Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 01:56 PST
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... O.o You know, I am so not in a yaoi mood right now - but I still loved this. I am loving your Goku (There's a surprise *rolls eyes*) I'm loving your Vegeta (there is a surprise *widens eyes*) The letter Bulma wrote to Goku nearly broke my heart (Always had a soft spot for Bulma, no surprise, eyes remain the same) Ahhh - hurry up and continue - see if you can get my yaoi enthusiasm back (It comes and goes on a regular basis)
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 19:01 PST
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I liked ATTWT and this looks to be a great start to a sequal. I like the solo Goku and how you handled him as well as explain the changes in him. However I was sad to see so much of his innocence go as well as the apathetic attitude he had. I'm looking forward to seeing how this plays itself out. -EL-
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Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2005 01:49 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I was acknowledged! Glad I could help.^^ Just a wonderful start; I look forward to the rest of the chapters. I like how this story and the previous were only mildly AU and keep to the original storyline in most parts, such as Goku's leaving to train Uub; I also like Goku's bumming around aimlessly on those islands-- I can see him doing that after so many events that made him feel lost and confused. Goku's POV is extremely well-done. It seemed strange to hear him being so serious and angsting about the past, but as you said, the experience changed him and he admits he was a different person back then. Two paragraphs really stood out to me as crystallizing his feelings and state of mind (well, there were a lot, but these two especially). This one: 'There was no winning this. I was out. Bulma had her baby and Vegeta. Vegeta had his baby and Bulma. I had nothing. Oh, I could have still had Vegeta; Bulma made that quite clear. We could have still met and fucked. Somehow it didn't seem the same with the veil off. It seemed . . . dirty now. I didn't want to be dominated through sex because Vegeta couldn't beat me in a fight.' And this one: 'And he was right. I did. Despite everything, I did still want him, but not like that. Having him would mean being had, and I wanted more than that. I needed more than that.' Perfect, perfect!
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Title: Nice! ~.^
Reviewed By: Vegeta's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2005 17:16 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very tasty chapter, nice and angsty. I hope that chapter 2 is on it's way! Update SOON!!!!!!
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Title: Lord
Reviewed By: Denmark de la Croix [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2005 16:03 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aw. that was just beautiful. there will be more?
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