| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Title: ch.6
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2005 08:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ch.6 was a very well done chapter and Shinji now has done it with a total of ladies. The story is progressing along smoothly and I can't wait to see where this goes. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: cory On: August 14, 2005 20:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
keep writing
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Title: Great Series!!!
Reviewed By: AverageWolf02 On: July 21, 2005 01:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You really are a great writer!!! Everything about these chapters really keep you awake just wondering how it will turn out later on!!! You should continue this until you finish it up with the finale! Awesome job!!!
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: July 20, 2005 12:09 EDT
Comment/Review:
der'morat'aman: The last time I tried to use a pre-reader it led to a whole lot of critism that was basically my downfall from LT. On a different but bigger note, I'm working on the last chapter that signals the end of Day 2 so watch this space.
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Reviewed By: der'morat'aman On: July 20, 2005 10:00 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting story, though as you said I did see a lot of stuff that's been done before. I enjoyed it on the whole, though dear GODS you need some help with your English. The spelling was surprisingly good but at times there were large tracts that were rather difficult to follow. You would do well to find a prereader or editor and let them have a run or two at reordering a large amount of this. On the whole a good story, but better for a few passes by a competent editor.
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 22:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good smut want to see more please make chapters longer
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Reviewed By: climarathorn On: July 01, 2005 14:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i gave the spelling and grammar a 9 because there was a few mistakes but not many, all in all a good read!
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Reviewed By: NuttyAl On: June 10, 2005 00:40 EDT
Comment/Review:
Are you going to end the angel war by fucking the hell out of angels!?!?!? I can think of few other womens for shinji to fuck. How about my favorite..... MISATO!
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: June 05, 2005 13:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, this is a bit hypocritical, but what the hells with all this flaming of the reviewers. The is a REVIEW page, not a friggin forum. If some of the reviewers can't handle it they shouldn't be on here. As for you Taro, if you can't handle negative criticism what the hell are you doing writing.
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: June 04, 2005 06:22 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hikari is actually the neutral, she only acted like that cause she was horny and desperate.
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Title: Update Problem?
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: June 04, 2005 05:47 EDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
It's kind of a weird problem, but why is it every now and then your story comes up as updated but there are no new chapters? Anyways, this story is pretty good thus far, no spelling or gramatical errors that I could see thus far. I also haven't noticed any plot holes either. Hikari was a little OOC, but so is Asuka for that matter. I guess that having Rei tend to him seems to have been the catalyst that started everything rolling. For the most part, considering that the people involved are some really horny 14-15 year olds, I guess that their sexual urges got the better of them. I'm waiting for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Oldwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 01:11 EDT
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Alright, I'll admit it, good chapter. The characters seemed a bit off, but given what's been happening, it's understandable. Still, I have high hopes for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Innortal [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2005 01:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job. The style and story is flowing smoothly, and I am looking forward to seeing how far this goes before their plans for Shinji blow up in all of their faces. Innortal
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Title: Taro
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 13:46 EDT
Comment/Review:
It was actually rushed cause I had like another 2-3 scenes worth in there but I was dragging it along so I posted it. You'll be getting those extra 2-3 scenes in the next episode in which Hikari will play a part.
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Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 01:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, good to see ya updated! I see some more of the good stuff, keep it coming!Now the review~ I like your style, but somehow this chapter felt a bit...rushed maybe? Not a major complaint because for all I know, you're setting up something big (which you are of course). Again, nothing major, but my biggest one. Your spelling and grammar? superb! no mistakes I caught. I'm looking forward to seeing how you mix up all three girls and Ikari together, so keep it up!
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