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Title: Awww!
Reviewed By: freethephoenix On: May 14, 2005 05:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have a question, and the answer is probably so obvious I'll feel silly for asking, but I noticed that Sess and Toga both refer to themselves as 'This Sesshoumaru' or 'This Toga'... I really don't understand that but I've read enough fanfics to assume it pertains to something lost in the translation from Japanese to English. So my question is, if Cain is the Inu no Taisho of America, then why doesn't he refer to himself that way- 'This Cain' ? Is it because he's American and it's a strictly Japanese thing? Did I just answer my own question? I lied, I really have two questions. The second one is, what exactly is going on with Cain's Youki? From the other Purity fics, it seems like the Youki identifies the 'mate' and hammers this fact home to the conscious mind. But Cain's seems to do the opposite? The whole 'run away! run away!' That's probably some part of the plot you're planning on expanding on anyway so you're more than likely not at liberty to say. Oh well, it's a really interesting point. Finally, this is an excellent chapter. I especially liked making a connection between- 'Zelig-sensei would be much more ... impressive' and "It was bigger. But that looked weird"- I laughed and laughed. And the ending, oh the ending. I print your chapters out so I can go curl up on the couch and read them, and I was sitting in the living room with my family when all of a sudden I shout out "She belongs with you, Baka!" Now my family worries about me. 0.o Play on, Maestro.
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~not logged in On: May 13, 2005 22:56 EDT
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Man, i got to say. the pantsing deal had me hystericaly laughing for a good ten minutes, no joke. all i kept wondering was if InuYasha had ever been given the chance at their age, would he have done that to Sesshoumary (then knowing that Sesshoumaru's kin suffered the fate) it's just to good to pass up. great, absolutly wonderful stuff!!!! honestly, an i mean this; that has to be one of the funniest things i've ever read in fan fiction, hands down. i know, it's sooo simple (and growing up with boys, you'd be to think i would be use to it) but still. just....halarious. the chapter, as always, was amazing!!!! i am really interested to see where the whole Cain following Gin thing goes....and how Inu is going to react to her daughter's choice in...men...(regarding cain). as i said before, and as you forshadowed, at least he is a man who probably could hand inu his ass. great stuff!!! keep it up!!!
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Reviewed By: Wlfhund On: May 13, 2005 21:56 EDT
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Oh! That was so good! So does Cain bang his head against the wall regularly? If not, maybe he should!!! I can almost visably see the incredible frustration welling up inside this poor youkai! Oh man, can you say tension? Nice work Sueric! Wlfhund
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Reviewed By: Akihana [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 21:40 EDT
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Getting asked out by the nude model you just sketched. Thats one situation I never would have thought of. I was laughing really really hard when I read it. Cain is so obviously jealous too. It really shouldn't be funny, because I think the situation could turn serious, but listening to Cain's internal dialogue had me laughing. Did i mention that I was laughing? Awesome chapter. Gin delights me to no end. She must have had it so tough, to deal with brothers like that. I'd have killed my brothers if they ran into a group of my friends naked. Wait..they have done that.....stupid brothers.
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Reviewed By: Shadow_Within [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 20:56 EDT
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ROTFLMAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I......can't......breathe!!!!!!!!!! That was soo funny!!!! I love this chapter! Can't wait for the next time when Cain 'follows' them. And his name!! Montaro!!!! And the 'real meaning'!!!!!!! The irony!!!!! I don't think I could draw anyone naked.
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Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 20:36 EDT
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LMAO...Montaro...oh wow, that was a good one. Shame on Cain making Gin draw something like that...she shouldn't be seeing other men's parts if she's his....The flashback of the sleep over was hilarious!!!
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Reviewed By: yasha 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 19:56 EDT
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I really llike how Cain's Yokai(I may have spelled this wrong. I keep forgeting how it's spelled) is unique, not that all of them aren't, but Cain's is especially difrent. Unlike the other's his is the one telling himnot to go after the girl. I think that what Cain does not understand is that his mate would only want for his hapiness not the half-life he has given himself, though she'd still want a place in his heart and of curse she will always have one no mater what. I truly hope he learns this and accepts Gin. By the way this chapter was very funny especialy Gin's inner conversation about he sketch (which I could imagine hapening any other way) and Cain's reaction to Mantaro's (who better keep his hands off Gen nad his mouth shut or else He's in for a world of hurt.) question and atitude. ............................Ja Ne ....................................Yasha
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Reviewed By: trinigirl524 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 17:52 EDT
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ahahaha! that slumber party story is hilarious and"big boy" haha....well things look doubtful for the relationship with gin and cain...their youkai are calling out for one another but they dont seem to realize that yet...they're meant for each other...*dreamy sigh*
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Reviewed By: serendith (NSI) On: May 13, 2005 17:29 EDT
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For humor's sake: Montaro means Big Boy. *laughs* That's great! I love the angle your taking with this story.
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Reviewed By: CJ Finnegan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 17:28 EDT
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Gin's embarrassment in her art class reminded me of my own days in life drawing class. Two thumbs way up!
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Reviewed By: cj flutterbye On: May 13, 2005 17:09 EDT
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LMAO! I am reading at work, and having to keep my mouth shut!! Man, it is hard to do that!! I was shaking laughing so hard, I know I snorted once!! (luckly for me my working co-horts don't care) Gin's fourteeth birthday party, LOL, I would have DIED if my brothers had done something so evil - not that Kich didn't deserve being tied to a chair - he did start it after all. Cain is so cute! Telling her she nearly has wings... awww... I swear he is going to come to blows with his own Youkai!! He'll be kickin' his own ass!! LOL!! I don't think I've ever seen the word penis used so many times in one place, except for maybe medical books(and certain chat rooms) Wonderful stuff!! Happy weekend!!
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Reviewed By: Suze-nsi On: May 13, 2005 16:53 EDT
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All I can say is thank GOD the rest of the office has either left for the weekend/summer or is still at the big employee meeting that I skipped. Otherwise, my howls of laughter would have definitely raised a few eyebrows. LOL! :D
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Reviewed By: Terrasina Dragonwagon (it still insists I'm not me...) On: May 13, 2005 15:26 EDT
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Big Boy, heeheeheeheehee. I love it. Awwwww, Cain's getting all jealous...heehee.
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 14:39 EDT
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yay!! another update...*snickers at Cain* jelousy doesn't suit him...oh well maybe he'll start realizing that gin isn't just a dream...wish Gin would hear her youkai...does she i can''t remember if she's ever actually talked to it like Kich, Ryo, Toga, and Cain(and anyone else who i may have forgotten)?? oh well, update asap, 'till then...Zirra
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Reviewed By: Valdimarian [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 14:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I usualy dont post on media miner (yours is actualy the first Media Miner review I've done) but I have reviewed your story on Fanfiction.net under the same name. Anyway, this chapter reminds me of some of the more OOC Sesshoumaru/Rin stories I've read. But just because it's out of Sesshoumaru's character, does not mean that it's bad, or that it's out of Cain's character. Anyway, I hope you get around to posting these on Fanfiction.net, or at least that FF.net decides to send out the notices to me at some point....
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