| "A Night of Pleasure" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: sesshy'sangel18 On: July 13, 2006 04:09 EDT
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This was interesting at first i thought it was inu/kag but shocked at the end.
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Title: Confuzzled
Reviewed By: kawaii_kit On: January 24, 2006 16:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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I really liked it, unfortunately i'm one of those "canon as hell" people so not knowing who it was (still not knowing the male) bugs me. It was really great, but kirara kinda gives me the hebie-jebies unless it's someone plausible... At first I was like o it's a mir/sango fic, and then i was like ok... not sango... anyway, i liked but i would like to know who the guy was so when you get a chance e-me at assassin_chiq@msn.com thanks.
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Reviewed By: ^^ On: December 16, 2005 14:16 EST
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me agin1 i read other rewiews and conluded to wasnt koga or sessy cuz as someone said... they would have said pups... and it culdnt have beem miroku un less he was ooc... cuz it said he had to wait along time and mirokus dune that and more just to meditate to become a budda...and yes for all those ppl who dont know even if there ir Buddaothers can still try to become one...its acctually quite a long story so i wont go into it
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Reviewed By: ^^ On: December 16, 2005 14:09 EST
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oh please dont tell me its shippo!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: kt On: December 03, 2005 20:02 EST
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wow no idea it was kilala! whos da male? i'm stumped! i think i have an idea...but anyways nice fic! it's a good pwp in all!
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Reviewed By: Anata [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2005 19:31 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, you asked me to review after my email, so I shall. I really had no clue as to whom the characters were, even though I kept guessing. As I said to you, I first thought that perhaps the female was one of Naraku's women, since he is also identified as a hanyou. I found myself constantly reguessing, yet never settling on someone who could have actually been the character. I definitely was not expecting Kirara. Very surprising, although not unpleasantly so. I like the interpretation you took of her character; it was uniquely feline, yet quite personified, as well. Yes, definitely worth the read. And me, well, I'm personally into the kinky master/slave, BDSM thing, so that was a major turn on. Although, I've always found it a bit disconcerting to read a fic and not know what person I should picture; I guess it's one of those vivid imagination things. When I couldn't settle on who she was, I found myself either trying to fill in the images of the characters, or she would just become a bit hazy and shadowed. Normally, I can at least swipe a fairly close guess as to which characters I'm reading. Very well done; you kept me guessing until the end.
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Title: the male
Reviewed By: Inusbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2005 14:43 EDT
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I had it figured out… I'll tell you who it can't be. Any K-9 characters - they would say pup not kittens, their ego is too great Shippou - just a child No Humans - this male can smell she was in heat, and isn't part of the pack said (her pack) This male also understands what Kirara is saying Actually would like to see more along this story line
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Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: Sari-15 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 19:27 EDT
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Well this was an interesting PWP. It was a nice attempt to write in first person, something that is quite difficult to pull off for even experienced writers. The use of 'I' to start a sentence really wore on me quickly though, in most instances it isn't necessary. You can drop it from the beginning of the sentences in almost every one by changing things in the sentence [adding an -ing and similar changes] and still keep it in first person. It would also make it flow smoother. If you blend 'I' into the middle of a sentence it isn't so glaringly first person. Your goal should be to make your readers not realize they are reading something from that POV, otherwise it detracts from the actual story. Description. Although this is in first person...I don't feel pulled into it. I would rather be shown everything that is happening...you did a lot of telling in this. [The next thing I feel is that tongue of hers giving me ungodly amounts of pleasure.] Stuff like this can be SO detailed with a little description. Be inventive...use the character's senses. What does he feel? Is the tongue rough, cold, what kind of emotions does it cause? What kind of a response does it create in him? Does he have to bite his lip or prevent himself from moaning? Other than that, this was an interesting read. Thanks for submitting to FFARG. Hope to see another submission soon.
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Reviewed By: luna chick (nsi) On: April 22, 2005 00:38 EDT
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I knew it was kirara, but you definitely surprised me with the male. I'm glad to see that I was on track to begin with. Nice work, good word choice. The story flowed without much technical difficulties, considering I wasn't sure what I was supposed to be seeing. Got to go, definitely take some of those ideas I seemed to have given you Nena
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Reviewed By: Dark Angel Of Love [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2005 19:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
man I totally loved this! it was a great ending! I never would have thought it would have been HER! ^________^ keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: Nirvana Renegade Seiga On: April 04, 2005 21:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow. this has got to be the first fic with Kirara i've read... is it Shippou? Email me PLEASE!!!! lestatthevampire04@yahoo.com
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Title: EEP!
Reviewed By: Kyina On: April 01, 2005 22:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
SO cool! I've never read a fanfic on kirara! Totally awesome!
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2005 15:27 EST
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Scrumdiddilyumptions!! though we now know that mistress is Kirara, but who is her willing slave/mate?? i'm guessing the Mate could be Koga or Seshommaru or some other secondary charater..please tell us...
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Reviewed By: Blur On: March 31, 2005 14:10 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol Couldn't believe it was Kirara!? So thought it was Kagome or Sango with Sesshomaru Good work.
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Reviewed By: ^____^v On: March 31, 2005 00:59 EST
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is it a miroku/kirara?! not bad...it was pretty hott ^___^
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