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| "Dream a Little Dream of Me" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: EquineBabe [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2005 15:20 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, this was great..I loved the twist! pelase continue and update soon!!!
| Reviewed By: Artemis Moon (not signed in) On: May 04, 2005 21:39 CDT
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So far I've really enjoyed this story and you've done a very good job. It was interesting and has some excellent plot twists that left me stunned, lol...the only suggestion I can make is that you perhaps do something to tie together the last chapter of her dream and the first chapter where she's awake. How do I explain this...it is such a jarring leap from one to the other that for a while there, I was convinced you must have accidentally uploaded a chapter of another story. ^^;; I actually scanned ahead to see if I could figure out if it was the same story or not, and finally realized it was and continued to read. So to help other readers you might try to soften the transition somehow. I'm not sure exactly how. It doesn't have to be anything big, perhaps as simple as stating something in the author's notes that no, you really haven't accidentally stumbled into another story, lol! Oh, and also, I don't know if it was an uploading problem, but the first and second chapter are the same for some reason. Anyway, I can't wait to see more because that was a terrible cliffhanger! Update soon! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Akihana [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 21:45 CDT
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Well, that made my day interesting. Its so much easier to search on ffnet. Aww. I do try to review. I'm actually logged in this time too. nothing like bluntness to get through tough stuff. Though, i expecterd nothing less from our Yasha. Kagome took it rather well....though, she had just gone through the same thing in her dream. Ooo. What a great cliffhanging last sentence. That just needs to be followed by some good premotion music. Dun dun duuunnn. Heehee. Great job, and can't wait until you update, and tell us exactly what Kikyo meant.
| Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 16:44 CDT
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oo oo oo are the demons free? I'm pretty sure they are, but are they evil or good(hm why does evil have two words*bad and evil* where as good is just good*shrug* i donno) sorry for the randomness :P. well great chapter, glad kags and inu are all good again, can't wait for more, update asap please, Zirra ((PS thanx for sayin thanx, just doin my job as a reader)) Zirra
| Reviewed By: Techica On: April 17, 2005 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg! This is so good! Please update when you can. I love the twist!
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Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2005 00:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
how many times are you gonna repost this fanfic?
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