| "Chaos!" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
| Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] |
Title: cool
Reviewed By: JamminChick93613 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2006 21:52 CST
Comment/Review:
That was good. The only thing that could make it better is if it were a real fic instead of a one-shot. Oh well it was good!
|
Reviewed By: Manga Girl (too lazy for my shirt) On: July 15, 2006 23:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I laughed so hard when Kagome accidently "sat" them all. I agree with foamyfan15010, never thought I'd see the day Sesshomaru would kneel for our Kagome! You really need to give us another chapter. Our evil chibis will be the least of your problems... *evil grin*
|
Reviewed By: Kirara_Cutie316 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2006 09:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You better add more or I'll send evil chibies! I mean it!
|
Reviewed By: Koga or Kouga/ Kouga's Girl On: May 11, 2006 19:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like it!!!
|
Reviewed By: Mnote On: May 10, 2006 21:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GODDAMIT IF U DONT ADD AN INDING I WILL FIND OUT WERE U LIVE AND I WILL GUT U!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
|
Reviewed By: kane shi megami [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2006 22:33 CST
Comment/Review:
NO! That was so funny and creative, you can't just leave it there!
|
Reviewed By: kiara knight On: September 29, 2005 17:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
You could have Rin turn up right before Sessomaro (sorry about spelling) hurts Kagome. Then he can't hurt Kagome right away.
|
Reviewed By: JadeWriter [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2005 03:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought the story was great. It was pretty enjoyable to read, and I actually giggled a bit. That's pretty clever that it ends without actually having an ending (no definite conclusion). That's not something I've seen on here a lot. Very nice. ^_^
|
Title: the funniness
Reviewed By: kagsessdaughter Silver [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2005 12:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was the funniest thing i have ever read wut up a new chapter soon please
|
Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2005 09:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to FFARG! The first thing I noticed was the strange shift in voice in the very first paragraph. It started out "I can't go back" then shifted in the next sentence to "You, Kagome". This will deter a reader fairly quickly. I also noticed that certain words seem to be misused tense-wise (ex. 'conflicting' girl should be 'conflicted'). Some of the sentences are not complete sentences and are left dangling without appearing to be done on purpose, and there are moments where a little tightening of your sentences would lend a more cohesive feel to your writing. I suggest a very good beta reader to help you iron out the kinks in your fic. Overall it was a solid bit of work, and with a little help, I think you have the grounds for a good fiction! It was definitely entertaining, and since satire is hard to write while keeping characters in check, you did a good job in trying to make them behave. Thanks again for submitting to FFARG!
|
Reviewed By: Custodian Of Dreams [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 06:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man, the fic was hilarious! It was really a superb idea to use Sesshomaru like that... cute and funny! The dialouge was a little chaotic at places... but that's the point, right? ~CoD
|
Reviewed By: Jason C On: April 26, 2005 05:31 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thats is one good one-shot. I bow before you. Nice ending leaves the readers imagination run wild. Hahahaha well it was a good one
|
Reviewed By: White Tiger Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 01:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! That was hilarious!!! Sesshomaru kneeling before Kagome, I have never heard of such a thing. Please, you have to come up with an ending. This would make a great story! Kagome finally got into a hole to deep to get herself out of without having to pay a price. I could only picture what would/could happen next. LOL! Please, at least think about continuing it!
|
Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: LubHAruka On: April 25, 2005 22:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with foamyfan15010. You should come up with an ending! Man! I have to tell Mai fwend this! She loves sesshomaru and when she hears this story she's going to go all mid-evil on me....with is very amusing.... the way she curses and chases me trying to kill me..... i'm off topic! Well i'm trying to say that you should get over a 10!!!!! GREAT JOB!!!! p.s. If you don't want to make an ending that's okay....i have a very strong imagination wich I can't controle somtimes okay BAI!!!!
|
Reviewed By: foamyfan15010 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 14:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
OMG! ABSOLUTELY HILARIOUS! I never thought I'd see the day when the high and mighty Lord Sesshomaru would be kneeling before lil ol Kagome. Pure genius. Please come up with an ending... soon! lol *kneels before you* I worship your boundless talent!!! lol :o)
|
| Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] |
