| "Visions of the Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 31 ] |
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Reviewed By: cettie-girl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2005 14:33 CST
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Yay! You updated and finished the story! Only... the rest of the "books" to go! ^_^ I liked the changes you made. They make a lot of sense to someone re-reading it. One question though, when did Yami and Yugi adopt the nicknames "Ki" and "Ka"? Does that happen sometime later than the spot that you stopped on ff.net at? You made Yuugi's dad dead? I know he's not in the original (I think Takahashi-sensei said that he was away on business trips), but I've written him as dead before too. (yay for plot bunnies?) I can't wait to read more! ^^ Oh, and... *puts on a santa hat and Christmas socks* Merry Christmas! ^_~
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 08:38 CST
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Great ending. I hope you explain more in the next chapter. I loved it.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 08:37 CST
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This was great. I can't wait to read the last chapter.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 08:33 CST
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This was great. I can't wait to read the last chapter.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 08:25 CST
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I must say when you update you update. I am enjoying this immensly. Great updates.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 08:00 CST
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That was even worse than I imagined. Ushio is truly ( I can't even think of anything bad enough to call him) beating up Yugi and ryou is bad enough but to beat on an innocent blind person is just too much, I hope Bakura gets him good. Death is too good for him.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 07:45 CST
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Is Ryou nuts? Does he thin walking home alone will be easy? I hope he makes it without a problem Great update.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 07:34 CST
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This was great I hope you are over your writer's block and update soon.
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Title: chapter 12
Reviewed By: cettie_girl On: July 25, 2005 13:49 CDT
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Chapter 12! Yay! And, yay for Wicked. Yes, I've seen it and love it, and have the sountracked memorised. *is a musical theatre geek* Poor Ryou. Just... poor Ryou. Was all of that basement part there before? I remember the prison bit, but I don't remember the haunting and the things in the basement. *hugs Ryou* I don't blame Yuugi and Malik, let alone everyone else for being so distraught. *sigh* being afraid of the dark when blind is NOT a good thing. Not at all. I agree with you that Yuugi is the kind of person who would do anything to save his friends, even if it meant giving himself in for something he didn't do. He's got quite a heart, that one, doesn't he? *hugs Yuugi* Yay for Ryou's first show of magic. That scene got me the first time too. Unfortunately, the arabic showed up as giberish on my computer... :( I noticed a couple spelling mistakes, like "opon" (should be upon). I know there was at least one other but I can't find it now. ^^; Hope to see more posted here soon! ^_^
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Title: chapter 11
Reviewed By: cettie_girl On: July 25, 2005 13:15 CDT
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This review may be rather short in comparison with the others I have given. If so, I apologise. If not, then yay for pointless apologising! I love Yugi for sleeping in the bathtub. Slightly cute mental immage. He'd be the most likely to be comfortable there too, with the whole short factor going on and such... ^^; Sakura a reporter? I somehow can't see that happening, especially if I do indeed have the right Sakura in mind (CCS, right?). >.< Yay for Mokuba and Seto having their first ever inner fight, if you will. Lots more spacing out to come. So this is when Bakura finds himself to be alive once again. I thought he might have taken this as a good thing. Being alive generally is considered good at least... ^^; (And the others will gradually follow suit too! Yay!) Finally, yay for Isis blowing things up. Scary what people can leave lying around the house, isn't it? Just one more reason to stick to tea. :P Well, anyway, I hope you complete your goal (mind you, that would mean doing a lot of work/uploading over the next 5-6 days...). Whether or not you do, I hope to read more awesomeness soon. ^_^
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: cettie_girl On: July 13, 2005 21:49 CDT
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...and the 3rd person tense that became the normal tense for the series was born. ^_^ Yay! Chapter 10! This was the ending of the story originally? I'm glad you continued. I mean... look at what this has become! It was really worth it, wasn't it. (and don't worry Unmei and Chiot, we all love you... ^_^) Yay for Yami Mokuba. I would laugh if Seto ever decided that he wanted to be called that rather than "Seto" or "Kaiba". That would be interesting... if a little scary. There are so many things that happen in this chapter that impact the rest of the series, isn't there? Besides the whole Seto and Mokuba sharing a body thing and the use of third person, there's also the first real signs of Yami Bakura both being nice, and having remorse for his actions. I love Yugi in this chapter, and how he acts as the person who's there to comfort whoever needs it. It sounds muchly like a position I would get myself into if needed.... And, as a final thought, thank goodness for a chapter with a non-cliffhanger ending! :P
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Title: Chapter 9
Reviewed By: cettie_girl On: July 13, 2005 21:28 CDT
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Ouch. Almost having your heart literally removed from your body by the mind controlled spirit of a teenage CEO cannot be fun. Thank goodness for people collaborating to get Ryou and 'Kura out of there. I'm curious. Did you make up the words of the spell/the spell itself, or is it based on something? You may have answered this in the original version, but I forget. ^^; *is glad no one was turned into a penguin as Isis suggested might happen* (why did that line make me picture someone being trapped as a little penguin PLUSHIE?) For the record, the line "For the love of Funny Bunny, look at Kaiba" had me giggling for a few minutes. I can really hear Pegasus saying it... but... *giggles* It's just so perfect... Poor Kaiba/Pegasus/Jonathon, trapped in the shadow realm... (yes, I remember what happens to Kaiba-kun, but that's beside the point at the moment). Having your soul trapped in one realm, while your body remains unable to take you back mustn't be a fun ordeal... At least their souls aren't being sacrificed in order to bring forth some sort of great beast... ^^; Anyways, great chappie once again. ^_^
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 12:13 CDT
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I love it!! I will not even hazard a guess of what Ryou did. I hope they get everything straightenend out and Get Ryou his sight back. Update soon, please!
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Title: chapter 8
Reviewed By: cettie_girl On: July 09, 2005 20:42 CDT
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Good use of emotion in this chaper. I loved how distraught you made Mokuba here. I mean... anyone would be upset and want revenge if they just saw their beloved older brother die before their eyes... *hugs Mokie* I also enjoyed Joey's whole "lack of evil spirits" thing. That was good. ^_^ Poor Ryou... the locking rituals are not fun. For some reason, I thought they weren't until "All Saint's Night". Shows how long it's been since I last read these, eh? Yay for rereading, and yay for editing and reposting, I suppose. ^^;
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Reviewed By: Angelic_girl(notlogedin) On: July 06, 2005 01:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
the plot get better and better! great job! wow bakuras mortal didnt see that one comming....
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