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| "The Wolf & The Mouse" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: fire0ice On: July 29, 2005 23:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
more, more ,more pretty please with a cherry on top
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 18:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
I have to admit, I went to this one at first with trepidation, because I'm not a cross-over fan. But it was really funny, and cute, and I liked it! Well done. However, you should really give this one another read through. There are tiny little typos all throughout it. Example: "quit just 110 iles from." Obviously, you forgot the m in miles. Also, the beginning paragraph is in bold, but there is really no reason for it to stand out like that. Whenever you start a new thought in Wolfwood's mind, be sure to capitalize it. Example: "Damn I'm a sucker, he laughed to himself, why does crazy stuff always happen to me?" It should be "Damn, I'm a sucker, he laughed to himself. Why does this crazy stuff always..." The first and second thought are two different sentences, so the second one needs capitalization. These are just minor things to fix. I see no real problems with your storyline, though. I found it funny and entertaining. Great job on keeping them in character, and nice ending. Thanks for submitting this to FFARG!
| Reviewed By: pookymoni(not logged in) On: June 11, 2005 01:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought it was pretty funny, but my little brothers didn't understand it or think it was funny.What do they know? Oh well BYE
| Reviewed By: FrankyM On: May 16, 2005 15:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A touching tale about a man going nowhere realizing that great things come in small spherical red and white packages.
| Reviewed By: rexrich'sfriend On: May 13, 2005 15:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's a very kind a caring story, it's really good though, well done most def. a little too much on the sweet side 4 me though......1 thing i would say that not a lot of people really care 4 pokemon anymore, but the context 4 them meeting was a very pleasent and believable one though Pokemon never seemed 2 have 2 suns, unless that's the lost Pokemon Movie special yet 2 b writen ha that would b pretty good huh, we could make a lot of money ^_^
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