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| "A Silent Notion" Reviews/Comments [ 28 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: ^_~
Reviewed By: Anime_Lover101 On: January 07, 2006 02:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! That was great don't you dare change a thing I think you should write more I think you are a good writer
| Reviewed By: bloody_black_valentine [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2005 01:00 CST
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awwwwwwwwwww! i luved tht, i like the part when ya said ya were 'asleep', lol, tht was funny xD
| Reviewed By: inuyasha92689 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 09:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
OMG I love this story sooooo much and i cant wait to see what happends next so update it really soon thanks tootles.
| Title: WOW!!!
Reviewed By: KACD2 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 01:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. Wow... so much passion. Don't change a thing. i read the reviews before, and think most are pointless. Wish I'd seen it on FFARG, and reviewed it then. I enjoy Nautro, and need to finish the Manga, and MB watch the anime. I have a friend who LOVES it. Keep up the writing... (I told you I'd read more of you stuff ;) )
| Reviewed By: Harajuku Chick On: October 03, 2005 01:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought the story was great. If I was a 13 year old boy and gay, I would want my first time to be exactly like you described it. And just to point out some of your reviews are bull. Reading your story reminded me of the akwardness of being a kid and exploring your sexsuality. The way they "tested the waters" when they were in bed before they made a move was memerable and I think most people should be able to relate. I felt it was akward and clumsy, but that's exactly what your first time is like and I felt that you captured it.
| Title: FFRG review ch 1
Reviewed By: Sihde (Sisi) On: September 29, 2005 00:10 CDT
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First off, thank you for submitting to the FFRG. And as for a note, I took Japanese for 3 years in high school. And I don't know what "Usuratonkachi" means. Generally you should leave Japanese out of an English story unless it directly pertains to the story and doesn't have a translation in English. I'll note that you have excellent grammar and sentence structure in your story. You also have good description and characterization in your story. (Not that I have authority to state anything on the characters you used. I mean that the soul you put into your characters is good.) I have nothing really to complain about in the love scene other than that you may have over exaggerated in feelings and such along the lines of screams ect, ect. Other than all that, good work and keep writing.
| Reviewed By: VickiLe On: August 04, 2005 02:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was just mindblowing. I like the vivid description, the flawless putting together of the sex scene and the reasons for the love. I like how its funny, sweet and hot all at once.
| Title: ^0^
Reviewed By: sasunaru_ai [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2005 14:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*fans herself* Whoa...that was hot! *bows to greatness* Seriously, take it from someone who has read pretty much every Sasunaru fanfiction out there, seriously memorable fic. *wipes off drool* You have made my day ^________^ Kudos my young friend, many Kudos. =^.^=
| Title: Uh, Memo?
Reviewed By: Choi-sama On: July 09, 2005 19:52 CDT
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Some of these reviews are really dumb. The Makokam girl said, "Yaoi isn't my thing." like ten times! (Yeah, OK... I'M ANNOYED.) But that's not what the memo's supposed to be about. It's just that her review is waving in front of my face. What I really wanted to say was... Continue? Please? Prose coming from you is almost as good as porn coming from Jiyraya. (Yes, I'm lol-ing.)
| Title: You Did Good
Reviewed By: Choi-sama On: July 09, 2005 19:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been reading and reviewing fanfics for something like four hours, so I'll make this short: Everything but the sex scene was good, but the sex scene was good in it's own right. I guess it was just too poetic or whatever to fit into story, especially since the kinda sweet/kinda humourous tone was already... firmly established? Yeah, that's about right. Firmly established. Anyway, I thought that the first part, especially the dinner thing, was real nice. I loved the way you worded things, and... (insert content) So yeah, I am seriously writing too much. Basically, awesome writing, but the lemon was way too flowery. Brownie points anyway because it instantly made think of Jiryaya. ^__^
| Reviewed By: hostilecrayon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2005 19:43 CDT
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Hey, cum can be sweet. Trust me, I would know. And, I was talking about Pre-Cum, which is sweet almost always.
| Reviewed By: Chin On: June 03, 2005 17:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, it was fairly good, especially the beginning. I do think it could have been improved a bit, if you'd let the story play out over a bit more time. For example, when Sasuke was thinking they weren't ready, let them fall asleep. A night or two later, they could kiss and maybe do a little petting, and so on. Let the sex wait for, say, a week? Oh, and seamen. Not sweet, at all. You don't have to make Naruto gag about the taste, but possibly refrain from mentioning it at all. Oh, and drug should have been dragged. Drug as a verb is for slipping narcotics in someone's drink. Still, all in all, not bad at all. Do keep on writing.
| Title: A favor
Reviewed By: Makokam On: May 31, 2005 00:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, well, Yaoi isn't my thing, but it was well written and enjoyable even if it did have two thirtenn year old boys have hot gay sex. You pervert :-P But yeah, it was fun to read though the Yaoi part just isn't my thing so it didn't grab my attention. I will say though, that the sex was hot, just.... well, as I said, Yaoi isn't my thing. You did a good job writting this and I hope the next time you start a another romance/smut fic you finish it. Especially if it's say.... Naruto and Sakura/Hiata/... hell even Ino. Bah, rabmling. You did good.
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