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| "The Art of Vanishing" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: KawaiiGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2009 23:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was saddening and unfortunately cliche, but not horribly so. There were lines. Specifically, "There aren't enough pieces of her left this time. She cannot heal around a man." was one of those cliched bits, but it did sum up the emotion and the tension within the story, so it's easy to let it pass. I'm glad you didn't opt for the optimistic ending that so many other authors go for (no doubt to please readers). I just feel bad that Miroku is always condemned for having these feelings for someone - for (finally or no) being monogamous. Seems a bit non-Karmatic to me, but yeah... Either way, this was well written and an enjoyable read. Very much like most of your other stories. I hope everything's going well on your side of the computer. Have a happy Halloween~ ^^ ~Animefreak242 aka Kawaii Girl
| Reviewed By: missthix2006 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2007 16:08 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautifully written. It is truly amazing how you are able to capture these characters and make them your own. "There aren't enough pieces of her left this time. She cannot heal around a man." That is my favorite line, it really struck me and stayed with me. All your stories speak to me, and make me think and look at thing in ways I haven't before. Excellent.
| Reviewed By: Feudal Teller of Tales [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2006 00:21 CST
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Sad but beautiful in its own way.
| Reviewed By: LindsayemTaylor On: October 31, 2006 00:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am new to Sess/Kag but am so glad I came across your story. Having been lurking around fanfiction since my early days in xmen five/six years ago I have found very few quality fanfictions that have an excellent plot, good grammer and such attention to detail. I commend you. I feel really sad at the moment because of the last few chapters - that I was awake at 3 this morning reading, but it was real and I feel that although you could have ended it happily taht this made it so much better and gave the story the ending it deserved, not that I wanted or imagined. Congratulations upon rising above so many others.
| Reviewed By: Mikki Onigiri [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2006 20:15 CST
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this is a very powerful piece you have written. When I read this, I feel like I am living these little scenes and feeling her feelings of emptiness, sorrow, joy, and lost. I think you have connected with the characters and interpreted it beautifully in your own thoughts and words.
| Reviewed By: docbevculver [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2006 12:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, another powerful, sorrowful, yet beautifully written story. A sad tale, but I enjoyed reading it none the less. Excellent, as always! ~~Ang
| Reviewed By: Cyndi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 14:11 CST
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Normally I'm not into Mir/Sango, but I checked this out anyhow and I'm glad I did. I loved the part about healing, breaking and being unable to heal around a man. Such a true feeling about life that struck me. I loved it.
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