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| "The Chronicles of Kakashi & the Kunoichi from Thunder Country" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2008 02:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you new character.... at times I don't know if I want to strangle her or hug her... which means you did VERY well!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: kelocena [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 21:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I can say is that it's really good! I think you did a great job with Rikako-chan's character, and Kakashi isn't really OOC at all. Your writing style in this fic focuses a lot on how the characters feel (mainly Rikako-chan), which made me feel like I could understand them more. I've got the impression that despite how Rikako-chan acts, she wants to trust Kakashi, because she loves him and wants to know that someone will always be there to care for her, but she's afraid of showing him her weaknesses. I also like how in most fanfics OCs are self-insertions to create a stupid romance, but yours is like an actual story. That way it is much more enjoyable to read. Thank you for taking the time to read my review. I'm looking forward to reading the sequel!
| Reviewed By: Zetsuke [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2006 20:15 CST
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This is a great story, lot's of drama and a level of depth I thought impossible in a fan fic. Rikako's personality is incredibly deep; I enjoyed reading about her development immensely.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2005 15:48 CST
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I commend you on your skill to keep to your plot and leave some things alone as to keep your reader wondering what is coming up next. I did, however, notice a very minimum amount of typos, grammar errors, and tense changes. This is nothing that a quick self-revision can't cure. I believe your detail is adequate, but I do believe you need to expand upon your sentence containing "The shadow abruptly stopped at a house near the outskirts of the village." For example, why did the shadow stop, and what caught it's attention? Your OC does have some minor flaws, but nothing to worry about. I compliment you on having very scarce spelling errors and your research on plants before writing your story. With these few corrections, I believe your story will turn out just fine.
| Reviewed By: Niffyat [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2005 15:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so bad at writing reviews, I tend to blab on and on. But I'll try my best! Well, I'll start off by saying that I think you're portraying Kakashi well; he's in an OC situation at first glance, but after reading the story, it seems very in character (if that made any sense). Also, I love how you've developed Rikako. A writer not as good as you would have made her a Mary-Sue, but by showing us her flaws, it makes her A. a more human B. not a Mary-Sue and C. an intriguing character. Well, I can't wait for part 6!
| Reviewed By: Kakashi x3 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2005 00:05 CDT
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again, great job! I like how you make Kakashi very..in depht. We not only pay attention on the OC, but to the ninja as well...I like very much how you write, please do continue! Excellent job =)
| Reviewed By: Kakashi x3 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2005 18:33 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved your fanfic, it was written very good. And was very descriptive...And you did a good job on writing how Kakashi acts, instead of making him drunk or is cast under a jutsu in order to tell his feelings. Well done! =) Please continue soon!
| Reviewed By: Lotus Paradox [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 06:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I couldn't help, but be enthralled by this fiction. Very exhilirating, and wonderful. You have great skills. When reading your fiction, I felt anxiety, and am able to imagine what happens. Great job. I do hope you continue this and update as soon as possible.
| Reviewed By: Kohaku [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2005 01:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Highest ratings I've given in a while. I enjoyed your "The Ressurecting Scroll" one-shot quite a bit, so I decided to check out your other works. While stories this amazingly long usually only slightly catch my attention--(I dread knowing I won't want to stop reading until I finish, which may take an hour or more)--this one was unbelievably interesting throughout. I did get somewhat weary around the section on the team's bell training, because I felt we, as Naruto manga readers, have been through that once before and elaborating on it again would make it dull and boring. However, you did a good job by keeping it short and to the point, yet still giving it enough detail to tell us what's going on fairly well. I also enjoy Rikako; I think she was well-constructed as a character. She borders on the line of fitting an OC stereotype I have in mind, but she has her quirks that make her more unique. She's definitely no Mary Sue, though. Also, I have to commend you for rewriting this huge thing from a story you wrote a long time ago. I'd no doubt procrastinate like crazy and be annoyed by the feeling of obligation. @_@;; Sorry if you think this review is long-winded. ^_^ I tend to get that way when analyzing things. :3 I enjoy this, though. I'm looking forward to see how you decide to continue it. I don't expect you to get chapters out super fast, but please try to update as much as you can. (That's something I, as a writer, NEVER do. *coughhypocritecough*)
| Reviewed By: Shadow117 On: June 18, 2005 01:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has caught my attention well. Wow, there is one hell of a background check that's required for Rikako that I hope you'll explain thoroughly later. I love her attitude; calm, collected, and intellegent yet still kinda child-like. Overall a good OC in my book ( I dunno if it's just me but it's hard to come by stories with good ones.). Altogether this is a good start and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. BTW - 2 questions on the timeline. How old is Kakashi and is this before/after Naruto's genin days?
| Reviewed By: Kyuubi_Sharingan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2005 00:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, this story is really... intriguing, to say the least! *narrows eyes* so what exactly is the truth?? lol, anyways, I can't wait for the next chapter! I love your Kakashi and I really want to know exactly what is up with Rikako (I love her character! So complex and yet simple)!! amanda
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