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Title: AWW to cute
Reviewed By: harmony23 On: June 29, 2005 15:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes please do a sequal.....this was jus too cute. I liked it very much!!
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Title: Aww..
Reviewed By: DBZFan On: June 29, 2005 11:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww... this is so cute! Please write the sequel!
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Title: Bath Time
Reviewed By: MLF aka maccam On: June 29, 2005 05:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
AW that was so sweet. ^^. If you want to write a sequel than you should...
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Title: Aww..
Reviewed By: DBZBoyLuver [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2005 20:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww... this is so cute! Please write the sequel!
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Reviewed By: Jeanna On: June 28, 2005 20:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so cute do the sequel .
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 28, 2005 14:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
I sequel would be great. I thought this was a lovely little piece though as a mother of a three year old, I thought Trunks's speech was a little too good (I know people try to say "but he's the son of a genius"...even Einstein didn'g speak till he was 4). Anyway, most two year olds do speak in sentences (though limited to a 4 word max) and even with that can be hard to understand...even for the best speakers. Most toddlers don't use "but" and other such words. So I think you just need to take your time to think out the dialogue for younger characters better. Otherwise, this was a great little one-shot.
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Reviewed By: Trisha_ On: June 28, 2005 12:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i agree, that was so cute ^^ i love it. yup, you should do a sequel with Bra. oh she's just the cutest thing, and daddy's lil princess.
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