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| "Moonlight Tears" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: vbollman/Dragonlass On: September 09, 2005 17:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey there. story sound good to me so far. when are you posting another chapter?
| Reviewed By: Dianara Darkraven [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I can see where you are leading with this type of writing style that you are using. I'm going to share something I learned in college that may assist you in your future chapters. I really great story doesn't need cliffhangers to keep someone turning the pages. Detail descriptions, heart string wrenching emotion and a great plot line will keep people returning chapter after chapter. An occasional cliffhanger is fine, but it's like crying wolf after a while. You have a great idea, run with it! Don't try to bank up as many chapters by leaving us with short chapters with silly cliffhangers. It's going to turn people away from your story rather than turn people onto it. If you have a short story, don't be afraid of the one-shot. They are sometimes the best. Dianara
| Reviewed By: kaja1234 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 18:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
all the chappies are the same, you need to edit it or somethign, i really wanna read it.
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