| "The cast of the real world" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] |
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2005 17:14 CDT
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LUV UR STORY!!=)
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Reviewed By: Yamifanner [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2005 21:29 CDT
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Stupid Kikyo!!! Wanting to get Inuyasha for herself so make Kagome misreable for life! That bitch better not plan to steal Inuyasha from her!! Well, I'm hoping that Miroku will behave on his first date with Sango. He's so perverted that he cannot control it. So, hope you update ASAP!! Ja ne!!
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Title: JEEZ!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: animegeekfreak18 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 22:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHAT THE HELL!?!?! you leave such a wonderful story RIGHT THERE!?!?! are you insane!?! WRITE MORE!!! I wanna read more please!! Please update soon! Thanks! ~AGF18
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT logged off On: August 16, 2005 21:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update and thank goodness it wasnt rape!!=)
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 19:33 CDT
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nuuuu!!!! plz keep it inu/kag plz? plz plz plz??????
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Title: lol
Reviewed By: inuyoukai24 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 01:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aw damn, that is sooooooooooo wrong and you know it. wrong on so many levels...this should be interesting.
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 19:07 CDT
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luv your story update it!!!! plz?!?!?
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Title: VERY interesting :D
Reviewed By: animegeekfreak18 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 00:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a VERY interesting story.... please update sooon, so I can READ MORE!!!!!!!! :) Thanks! ~AGF18
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 21:24 CDT
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OMG RAPE!!!well im not entirerly sure but unless u update thats wat im thinking it is!!=)-whispers-im watching u Sesshomaru
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Yamifanner [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 21:13 CDT
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I think what Sesshomaru is going to do to Kagome is what he dreamt about to make Inuyasha jealous. Maybe Naraku is going to be jealous too of Sesshomaru. This story is really, really, really great!!! CONTINUE!!!!
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Title: Constructive criticism
Reviewed By: Porscha On: August 14, 2005 19:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I want to say that I do like your creativity with this. It's a good idea. There are some things that I find hard to deal with. #1)The spelling and grammer. Some of the words in your story are so distracting. You used 'whipped' when i believe you meant 'wiped'. A better word would have been 'rubbed' anyway.(peace=piece, herd=heard, sate=sat, witch=which, etc,etc.) There are also times when you leave off quotations. this makes it harder for the reader to know if the character is talking or an action is being made. #2)The pace things are happening too fast. I realize that you like to make your readers happy by up dating as much as possible, but its not as enjoyable if its rushed. Your readers will continue to read your fic even if you added more storyline. But dont bore them. #3)It is not long enough. your chapters are too short. you might as well combine 3 chapters and make it one. Like I said you dont need to rush. take your time with the fic. I promise it'll be better in the end. thats all I've got to say. it really is a great story, just needs some work. Please take this constructively and work on it.
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Reviewed By: Yamifanner [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2005 18:10 CDT
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This story is awsome!!! The lemon scene with Kagome and Inuyasha reminds me of what me and my boyfriend did at his house except we were so close to having sex. You must continue this story, I beg of you!!!
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT logged off On: August 12, 2005 13:59 CDT
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so far i so luv ur story so please update!!=)
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Reviewed By: black rose 666 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2005 11:46 CDT
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I want to know who came in!!!! please keep it as inu and kag pairing!!!! please!!!!
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2005 08:44 CDT
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WOW nice lemon so please update andlets see who intruded!!! ;)
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