| "Missing You" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: dog ears [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2004 14:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WAAAAAA!! That is so sad POOR CHI-CHI! WAAAAAA!! (GreatStory!)(^_^)
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Reviewed By: eyes_on_the_birdie [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2002 23:36 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
boy i loved this, it actually made me cry! |
Reviewed By: oroborus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2002 05:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your empathy for Chichi is evident. I was pleased to read this delicately viewed piece - so many authors portray Chichi as a nag and all-around irritating spouse and mother
, but I think that you have shown Chichi's true fondness as well as love for her family.
I like the vision, but your phrasing could do with some polish. As an example:
`I can't remember the last time
I only had one plate to wash,' she thought on a small smile.
would be better rendered as
`I can't remember the last time
I only had one plate to wash,' she thought with a small smile.
But above all, keep writing. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: December 28, 2001 04:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How sad. I feel so sorry for ChiChi. She's in so much pain and only Goku can make it go away. Good song fic. |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2001 21:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story was too. long it took me for ever to read it but it was good love your brother
ps needs more gohan |
Reviewed By: Mousei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2001 18:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was such a sad fic... It was sad, sweet, and very good. I really liked it. Poor ChiChi. ::sniffle:: :( Keep up the great work! And thanks for the review! ::grin:: |
