Title: Unique
Reviewed By: conchita [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 12:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Your plot is very original and your humor is great! But if I may give a little constructive criticism, with only providing the dialogue for the characters, I have a difficult time imagining their surroundings and thus really getting into the story with you and them. You don't need to change your format, its one of the cool, unique qualities to your story but if you occasionally added a little description of their surroundings sprinkled around within the dialogue in ()'s it would give your reader the same visual you get when writing it. It's the same way a script gives an actor motivation, you'll give your readers the motivation they need. Keep up the great work and I'd love to see where you go with it.
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