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| "An Undefined Rage" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: ^^
Reviewed By: Shane. On: May 27, 2006 16:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Personally, I have to disagree with the first reviewer. I myself, don't like Sess/Kag pairings, but, this is your story, and you should do what you want with it. I understand that accepting helpful citicism is good, but don't let everyone tell you how to make a story , you planned on writing. I mean, if they tell you what to, and not to do, then they can go make a story that they like, the way they like it, themselves, and not telling you, what you should, and shouldn't do. If you want to use japanese words, then do so. If you want to make a Kag/Sess pairing, do so. Don't let others tell you how to make a fic. This fic is yours, and yours only, and you can do whatever you want with it. Besides all that, I'm hooked, and I look forward to more chapters ^^. Shane.
| Reviewed By: Be-jeweled On: May 27, 2006 11:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kagome gets mad at Inuyasha and runs away. She bumps into Sesshoumaru some how and they fall in love. Do you know how many times this has been done? I mean really do you know? There's a site for Kagome and Sesshoumaru fics and more than half of them are just like that. Not very original. And stop with the Japanese words. Your readers know all this is happening in Japan so they're using there imaginations and pretending that the characters are speaking the language. When you throw Japanese words in there to make it more Japanese it just sounds stupid. If you want them to get the feel of it research Japanese culture and put something about that in there. Or even the food you have them eat can reassure everyone that this is taking place in another country. But please the Fangirl Japanese is a disease in fanfiction, stop the spread.
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