| "Hiei's Despair" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2007 21:47 CDT
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that was what i suggested/nagged about ^_^. still loving it after all this time!
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Reviewed By: Angel of forgotten souls [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2006 21:23 CDT
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I thought that chapter was really good. Hiei is my favorite character but I still liked it. It had a lot of realizm. Just to top off 'Dark Lord Tokunaga' how about, 'you stare into the light reflecting off the knives shiny surface you try to make a deep slice on your wrist but out of fear miss again and again. Soon your arms are so bloody you can hardly make out your target. You hit the direct spot as blood rapidly pours from the deep wound. Pain fills every inch of you, Paralizing you so all you can do is lay there; watching the blood flow. Hoping for enough blood to be gone so you can be done with your nightmare of a life. Each second passes as a lifetime over your limp form. You watch the images of your friends and family as you can feel the last drop of life leave your body, the last thing you feel is regret and self-hate as The blinding sun rips at your skin as you breathe your last painful breath' so how was that? I just made that up. e-mail me if you want to use it.
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2006 20:45 CDT
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAH If you thought this would make me sad, then you don't know me very well..... I've seen and read much worse. Say.... getting impailed on a pike and dieing slowly, so slowly that you are alive as the pike passes through your internal organs. Unable to do anything but twitch and hope for death while the pike slowly but surely rips your organs to shreads.....
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Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2006 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HE DIED! HA HA HA HA! and to think i used to be a hiei fangirl... ^_^ nice job!
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