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| "Bet with a Demon" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Suggestions
Reviewed By: GaaraLuva [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2007 13:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it, but it was a bit too short. Oh, well. (I accidentaly put 'Oh, wall'!! LOL!! I like doing stupid stuff like that 'cause even smart people like me do and say stupid things.) Give Gaara 1 friend named-er- her name will be, um, Mranda!She is about his/ Kankuro's height and is Sasuke Uchiha's twin sister and was thought to have been killed by the Uchiha Massacre(sp) and has demons both good and bad sealed inside her and has powers over all elements and is part a neko girl person andias a miko,too. Her past is much like Gaara's and she is secretly in love with him. She has only told Temari, Sakura, Hinata, and Tenten, and she is very pretty and has one eye about the same coler as Gaara's only a bit more green and the other eye is the same as Sasuke's. Gaara secretly likes her,too, and this is one of the few secrets he has actualy kept from Shukaku and he doesn't even relize it himself. Her hair is red with black, blonde, light brown, blue, brown, purple, and greenish-colored streaks. She usualy wears red or black, and sometimes blue, purple, green, or grey, often with some mesh material. Shukaku should do a pretty good job but gets into trouble quite a few times. Miranda, who knows him, and so do her demons, saves him. Also, Kankuro begins to get suspicions about his little bro and his freind. And Miranda is living with the sand sibs. Hope I helped!! LOL! L8R!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 08:04 CST
Comment/Review:
Me: I know the meaning of life! Gaara: Oh? Me: Yeah. To go through a series of horrible events then die. Gaara: You're so emo. Me: Yep. But I don't care. This sound so intresting. I'm not good with giving others ideas though...
| Title: cool
Reviewed By: uzumaki urufu [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2007 13:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was sweet,update soon,k?oh and if u dont mind,since i read urs,could u read mine? also,that was sweet!!!!!
| Reviewed By: The Silver Wolf [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 14:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i gave an overall rating of nine because i liked reading it a lot. what i think you should do is have the next chapter start off with Gaara giving over control to Shukaku. and Shukaku ranting about how good it is to be free, and such. Then have him interact with different people to try and prove to Gaara that he really can live Gaara's life better than Gaara himself can. But don't let Shukaku win. Have Gaara step up to the plate teach Shukaku a lesson in humanity. It'll have Gaara going completely out of character, but i think it would be pretty cool.
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