| "Ever More" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: halomaster_22 On: June 05, 2009 21:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
there are a lot of room for improvment but you need to update more often
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Reviewed By: randomreader504 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2008 01:40 CST
Comment/Review:
It doesn't always seem to flow smoothly, but there is deffinate improvement as the chapters continue to come out; i.e. the first 2 were hard to read b/c of format, I almost gave up reading it since I don't like short chapters that are all in one lump like that. Keep going, the story seems good overall, with growth potential.
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Reviewed By: ggfdhgfhhdhhh On: November 03, 2007 17:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
aaahhh no she can't tell anyone!!!!! i wonder what will happen plz write more!!!
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2007 00:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm not realy seeing where this story is going but sometimes that is a good thing so I leaves the reader guessing ya just gota update sooner and make your chapies a little longer I mean Chapter two was like a paragraph...well may be a little bigger then a paragraph but realy close to it non the less so ya XD...This story has potental...Nyuka
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Reviewed By: bk On: August 25, 2007 14:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
This your first story and I think you are doing a great job. You do have some spelling mistakes but who doesn't. My only conplaint is that I wish the chapters were a little longer. It is like you just get into the chapter and then it ends leaving you wanting more. I hope you don't feel I am being too critical because I don't mean to be. I know you are doing your best and hope you continue continue writing because I will be watching for your updates.
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Reviewed By: He_Who_Shall_Live [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2007 03:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very intersting. I think for your first fic it is decent. The formating was annoying and there are a few spelling/gfammar mistakes but hey, it happens. The characters (so far) seem to be in character. Longer chapters is always nice. All in all I think it will be a good story. Work some on the formating and maybe the lenght. (Reading other authors can give you an idea how to lay your fic out better) Questions? Catch me on AIM hewhoshalllive
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