Title: A few corrections that can be made b Reviewed By: Katia On: April 14, 2011 23:37 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Comment/Review: Ummm, the story is hard to read because the sentences and the speech isn't separated, and in different paragraphs. It is difficult to understand and it feels rushed. Other than that, this is a good story line. You just need to work on those 2 things |