| "The Call to a Trainer's Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: jean On: August 01, 2003 13:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
i love you fanfic...keep going...
now about the parent situation... try giving them the silent treatment it works...sometimes ...good luck |
Reviewed By: Yami Chibi Anzu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2002 10:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
NO NO NO NO!!!ONLY I CAN HOG ULTIMAWITCH!!I KNEW SINCE I WAS TWO SO XP!SHE'S MY FWIEND!!MWAHAHA! |
Reviewed By: edenscrushfan47 On: September 15, 2002 20:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT'S ME AGAIN!!!!!! i just finished reading "New Dawn".... your fan fic is getting much better!!!!.... normally i'd tell this to your face but that one girl at school keeps on hogging you... AAAH!!!!!!.... what was her name... oh yeah... i remember.... anyways.... i think your fan fic's getting really good except for some crucial points...
a) that comment about Quagsire was unnecessary... i mean it's like saying Ponyta looks like a horse except its tail and mane are made of fire... do they even have beavers in the Pokemon world?
b) the conversation with Pr. Elm was unrealistic... i mean you can't just make an exception and help this girl run away from home... because that's basically what he's doing...
c) and no Pokedex?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that's unreal... in that one episode of Pokemon.... the way you register for the Johto tournament involves your Pokedex....
other than that... it's getting good... and a cute charmander too!... hehehe... talk to you later... |
Reviewed By: Silver2039 On: September 12, 2002 18:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a really good fic There wasnt a single mistake and it was descriptive. Keep writing! |
Reviewed By: edenscrushfan47 On: September 02, 2002 00:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
first of all... if anyone was wondering i was the friend that the author was talking about in this note:
A/N: Ok, this might have seemed familiar, that one episode where Ash and co. were heading to Celadon City and that Mankey evolved into Primeape, yeah...that's what gave me he idea. And one of my friends wanted to know when the mystery part would take place. Well, that I can clear up. People...PLEASE remember about the key that was in Faye's hand and the dream itself. Those two events will trigger the mystery part. The mystery itself isn't as noticeable but more implied at rather than mentioned. So the “mystery” would be something you readers would have to keep in mind about. Err...that's all I think...
BACK TO MY REVIEW~~~~
and i also told her when we were IMing... that i would take back what i said if she had a good comeback chapter... the chapter wasn't as good as i was hoping... but was decent enough... and if she keeps on this track... i'm sure the story will come out well enough... so I'M SORRY about what i said... blah blah blah... i'll tell you when i IM you.... see ya...
P.S. if you noticed my enjoyment factor is higher... but my overall rating is still 8 because the prologue lowers the quality of the writing
P.P.S. ok... so i read it (the prologue) again... and it's not as bad as i made it out to be the first time... but everything i said was true... except maybe the part about the mystery about "is it going go get more interesting?"... but read my review AGAIN!!!! the review itself is not that bad.... (THIS IS TO THE AUTHOR)
P.P.P.S. in case anyone doesn't know... my first review referred only to the prologue... because she didn't post the chapter 1 yet... |
Reviewed By: edenscrushfan47 On: August 23, 2002 21:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok... i'm your friend and all... but to me... it's slightly boring... there needs to be more HAPPENING!!! faye's funny but nothing's happening... you need to describe your characters so we can understand there personalities... you know what's in or out of their character... enjoyable but slighly corny (i love pancakes!)... this is not strictly comedy so if more was happening it would be more adventure-like... there clearly is no mystery right now... except the mystery of "is it going to get more interesting?"... so yeah... i better stop before you hate forever... |
Reviewed By: Oracle On: August 23, 2002 17:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey girl! another awesome fic a la you! this is great, a can't wait to see the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: Anzy(Yami Chibi Anzu) On: August 23, 2002 07:41 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HIYA!!!!great fic^____^ *will be looking for the next chapter* |
