| "A Little Problem..." Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: Tyler Durden2003 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2005 10:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
More description needed so the fic makes sense. A plot needed so the fic isn't pointless. Characterisation needed so it feels realistic. You need a dictionary to learn about little things that good athours like to call "Spelling" and "Punctuation." I'm so tired of lazy, pointless fan fics like this that I can't be bothered to write any more criticism. Just put a little effort in to it next time. In fact this review is just a copy of the last one I wrote. That's how tired I am of these half-assed fics. To be honest I just feel sorry for you. Honestly, why do you think the word "Comedy" means unreadable, pointless, plotless, time wasting, half assed, mess?
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Reviewed By: purplechaos04 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2003 14:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol... that's cute!!! I think you did a good job and it's very original :) |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2003 20:55 CST
Comment/Review:
Rana, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!I'M REALLY GETTING CURIOUS
AS TO WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!UPDATE SOON!
Ja ne,
Rach-Chan and Rachel |
Reviewed By: CeciliaDiaz On: December 03, 2002 16:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey are you still writing that chapter. It seems ages although I can't wait for anything. I want to see the chibis torturing Pegasus. Mawahahahaha!
P.S. Rach-Chan please read my story "A TV Show and a Video Camara". |
Reviewed By: Leviathon_Squid [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2002 12:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this fanfic! The chibi Bakura and Kaiba were the best. |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2002 10:07 CST
Comment/Review:
Rachel-Yes my poor hikari is sick.She didn't get to see Harry Potter yet ethier.
Rach-Chan-I better really!!(sneezes) Really I am!!
Y.Bakura-She has some sort of cold.
Rachel-Oh well, at least I'm not affected.Anyway, update soon Rana and please send some tissues.
Ja ne,
Rachel and Rach-CHan |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2002 19:10 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey,yugiohluver, that anin't a bad idea.(walks off camera.)
Rachel-(arguing with Yami)No Yami, dad told me I was to rule Egypt.But just'cause I was a girl you got the job!!
Yami-Well 'Tousan always liked me better!!!
Rachel-(Burst into tears)Yami, your a jerk!!!
Yami(feeling guilty)Hey look I'm sorry Rachel.
Rachel-Just leave me alone.
Rach-Chan(walks in) let me guess?You two got into another fight?(pulls rope and has Pegasus dressed as saloir moon on a skate board)
Pegasus(with gag in his mouth)-Muffff mmmmMuffer fuf!!!!
Rach-Chan-Anyway. update soon Rana-chan and please have me beat Tea and get Yami!!I absolutly can not stand Tea!!!!! |
Reviewed By: yugiohlover On: November 16, 2002 13:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In your last chapter you asked who should revert back to normal. I think Pegasus should revert back to normal. Then he `tries` to take control over the chibies. But the chibies do like in the movies. You know...no. When the people tie up the enemy, put him(or her) no a big silver plater, and stick an apple in their mouth. Keep up the writing. |
Reviewed By: Rana-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2002 22:04 CST
Comment/Review:
^^ Whee!
Okay...Ky-chan, I'll putya in...^^
Rach-chan, m'glad you like it! An' the best part 'bout chibis is that I can blame any slight personality changes on the fact that they ARE chibis! ^^"
See, Lanyia would nevah act like that...
[Mentioned person enters]
C. Lanyia: *evil cute death glare at everyone* 'member what I said 'bout my Hikari... |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2002 21:18 CST
Comment/Review:
THANK YOU RANA!!YOU ARE THE BEST!!And you got my attitude
right, but my yami is more trying to take over the world.
she would DEFANITLY help Bakura to take over the world.
Rachel-Yup, I would ^_^
Rach-Chan-Anyway, good job and update soon! |
Reviewed By: Kyouki [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2002 19:43 CST
Comment/Review:
Hai, I wanna be in the story. Here you go, Merry Christmas... You get a description of me. o.o;; Yes, I do realize that it's not Christmas and tomorrow is Halloween.. Don't ask, I just say Merry Christmas whenever giving someone a gift or something of that sort.. It's a habit now.
Aibou:
Name- Kyouki/ Ky/ Ky-chan(Whichever you prefer.. O.O;)
Height-(assuming I have to put this..) 5'9
Hair- Black but I have a natural red tint in my hair and it gets lighter towards the bottom.. O.o;
Eyes: Hazel, yellowish in light.. I'm scary, ne? ^^
Personality- ..A little bit demented, I'm worse than my Yami.. xD Seto torturing is what I love to do, torturing anyone is what I love to do.. I cuss a lot.. -Glares at Yami.- And am very anti-social. I try to stay away from people because they scare me.. Yes, I have phobia of people. O_O;
Yami:
Name- Yami Kai
Height- 6'1 (O.O; He's taller than me! NO FAIR!)
Hair- Black, it falls into his eyes. Kinda like mine. ^^
Eyes: Crimson, like every Yami. ^^
Personaliy: A lot like meh, he's even more distant than I am, at least I talk to one person.. He's got a crush on Seto(-Laughs-), just like me.. Kind of scary how much we're alike. He normally just stays near me and adds little remarks to tell me how stupid I am.. Very mean person. ;.;
Kai: You're making me seem evil..
Meh: You are the Yami... Plus I'm only telling the truth..
Kai: ...Right.
Meh: -Hits him over the head with a frying pan.- Did I mention when he says something stupid I hit him with a frying pan? ^^
Kai: -Pulls out his sword menacingly.- ...You're going to make her turn me into a chibi?! -Growls.-
Me: ..Just now noticed it, huh? -Submits before running away from her Yami, laughing.-
By the way.. I'm obsessed with Yami/Seto and Jou/Seto.. I would probably try and get them together.. xD Either that or so other unlucky target.. BWHAHAHA. -Walks away.- ¬.¬;;; |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2002 13:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
P.s.I have band too and my band teacher is a jerk.
but my band won the apple fest!!!!^__^ |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2002 13:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
don't worry Rana-Chan!I get that ugly blouder sometimes
too.(of course my computer won't let me put my fanfics up either)
but I survive.And please get sleep, believe me with all those chibis
your gonna need it!
Ja ne,
Rach-Chan |
Reviewed By: Rana-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2002 22:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
Gomen nasai, Rach-chan!!!
I'm busyish!!! ^_^
As soon as Marching Band is over, I promise I'll update! if not sooner! I haff chapters fer other stories that are months old an' I haven't typed them up yet! Right now I'm trying to work on the art requests that I haff at my Anime Adoption site! After November 11th I should be free(r) and I'll get it up as quickly as possible!
M'also having a nasty case o' Writer's Block!!!
*glances behind her at a huge slab of the ugliest rock ever seen* It's been following me around like some dog that won't leave me alone!
*sighs*
Like I said, I will get it up as quickly as possible...*glares at the Writer's Block, then looks back at Rach-chan*
I'm also having Typing Block...can't type anything right today...*shakes her head*
Maybe I should start getting sleep...that might help...
--Rana-chan, Insane (and Tired) Authoress/Artress/Webmistress (of several sites ^_^) |
Reviewed By: Rach-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2002 21:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
Please update!!!!I've been waiting sssssssooooooo
long!!!! Please please pretty please with Ryou on top update!! |
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