| "Dante becomes a Pokemon trainer!" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: UH yeahhh
Reviewed By: ramaon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2004 22:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
UHH okayy that was weird lol n_n but hey.. YOU KILLED ASH *big hug* Seriously it was fun loll
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Reviewed By: Scarbie On: June 09, 2003 22:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
*LOL* This is a very strange crossover. It was pretty bogus that Dante just shot Ash like that, but it is true that that boy has an annoying voice. Overall it was funny. The image that stays in my mind is Brock going into fetal position when threatened. *LMAO* I'm really surprised that Pikachu didn't electrify Dante.
Like another reviewer pointed out, the spelling could be tightened up. |
Reviewed By: Random Anomaly On: June 07, 2003 19:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude this fic rocks!!!!
continue the chaos and comedy!!!!
*_*
I am TOTALLY hooked!!! |
Reviewed By: Guruhoro [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2003 11:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
The plot was weird, and something of a clichée. There seem to be a lot of this kind of stuff around, and the first chapter included a massive plothole as Dante shot a guy with no reason. There were some spelling and grammar mistakes. You should observe the difference between 'here' and 'here'. This was just one more work by a new author with no experience. Just keep writing more, and it will be okay. You should read more too, and see how the really good writers do the stuff. And maybe you should plan ahead... I wrote 6 chapters of Heart of the Winter without thinking what to do next. I tell you, it is Hell to find out that the plot is stuck. Just read more and write with thought, you'll do well! |
