Reviewed By: Chibi Piccolo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2003 01:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
The idea of Trunks being dictator of the world in the future was very original, but you never took the time in your story to explain several things, such as if whether Trunks used his dictatorship for good or evil. More detail, like describing character's features or the setting, would have made it much more enjoyable. There were a few places where you could improve on your spelling. Your characters lacked personality; either that, or they seemed very out-of-character. Just a fellow author trying to help :)
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