Reviewed By: DBZ Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2003 15:04 CST
Comment/Review:
Hmmm...it probably would indeed turn out to be a good story if you'd make your chapters a little bit longer and put spaces between paragraphs and stuff. Other that that, I can't say anything negative about the story. And also, make LOTS of updates! Peace out! ~DBZ Lover~
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