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| "The Alexandrite Pendants" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Title: Title optional!
Reviewed By: Scarlet Letter Pearl (a.k.a. WhiteFangKiche) On: February 25, 2004 07:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
HIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!! (Gee, HI reminds me of the chemical that I forgot the name) Well then, in that case, HCl!!!!!!!!! Don't worry, my brain is just overworked with excess chemistry problems. Onto business: style of writing 8 because... your narration isn't all that impressive (Ahem, I have to make myself clear because I have one favorite story that has incredible narration, and so many fics no longer have interesting narration) But your descriptions are pretty much general like how you would see in 8 out of 10 fics. Originality: Thank you! You have new students! Enjoyment Factor: Again, wonderful new students! (No offense, after all, I started off with a new student to the math club once, didn't I? But at least you put them in the middle of the story, which isn't tooooooooooo bad) Overall: Overall. We read an essay with the highest grade possible and it ended like this: "Just like Hitler's belief about conformists, always remember that your mother told you to 'Be Individual!' And so, be individual. Be yourself. Be exciting. . . . Either follow Hitler, or your mother!" (Yes! With an exclamation mark!) The whole class was laughing to death (this was in English) especially our teacher's emotion-in-reading-out-loud. Imagine saying the last line "Either follow Hitler, or your mother!" with FULL emotion and cheering!~ It was hillarious~~~~~~~~ And that essay got the highest grade possible - none of us could imagine why... see ya!~
| Title: Wolf Demon
Reviewed By: Katana no Youkai Okami On: February 24, 2004 16:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello! ^^ Um, Hiei is my brother?? Oro...? I already expalined to you my comments on AIM... Yeah... You write very well! And yeah, I WAS a bit out of character... I'd probably smile... A little... to try to make a good impression... Or glare at people. ^^;;; And I would snort indignantly at the idiocy of the class. -.-U Ididots have no place in this world... Good job, though! ^^
| Reviewed By: Rowan Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2004 19:54 CST
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This is soooo good! Please don't leave me hanging!
| Title: Title, title, do we need a title?
Reviewed By: WhiteFangKiche On: January 16, 2004 18:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I rated the fanfic! That felt cool! Style of writing 9: because I liked your ending of the third chapter, but the rest are pretty normal. Spelling and Grammer, I think you can figure that out. Originality/Creativity 7: because most of the storyline in this chapter, as I see it, is similar to Yugi meeting Shadi and Isis type thing. Enjoyment Factor: it's not too funny, but it's not like those big long history book that makes me fall asleep. Add them all together, the overall rating I feel 9 is pretty reasonable. PS I need ideas for Vacation in Anime World, otherwise I'm going to Yu Yu Hakusho Land and then end that fic because I really haven't the time for it. I'm trying to devote my spare time to Salangane's Tears, but my "audiences" aren't that good, so I might not really consider completing it on fanfic. I will complete the story however, and I will publish it only when i get a group of better readers. Noemie: Thy demand is too high. WFK: You are sounding like Hester! Noemie: Thou speakst as Hester as well. WFK: -_- Noemie: Why don't thou put Hester in thy "novel"? WFK: Speak normally! Besides, I don't think it's suitable to put Hester in there, she's not a very good person. Noemie: Ok, I'll speak normally. Hester is the main character in "The Scarlet Letter" and she um... committed... that thing. WFK: See ya! Noemie: What's with you? Yesterday you talked about Amory, and today you're talking about Hester, before you know it, you'll be talking about Rose of Sharon! WFK: No, anything but Rosasharon! *runs away*
| Reviewed By: WhiteFangKiche On: January 01, 2004 19:35 CST
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Meow, I'm here again, or woof or roar or whatever sound White Fang makes, he makes kikiki sound when he was young i think. Anyways, i know that incident, you told me ^^ I'm not going to ask questions today, I'm not going to ask questions today, I'm not going to ask questions today...
| Reviewed By: WhiteFangKiche On: December 30, 2003 18:47 CST
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Hi hi, it's me! It is an interesting story, so when are you going to update next? ff.net should do this kind of things too. but all the things of the alexandrites are sort of bases on the millenniums, right? so does Ari's position = Yami's position? Amber = Yugi? type, thing? how old are your characters? Amber is going to calc class, so i'm assuming around 15 at least. (gee, that 11 year-old kid in my calc class doesn't really count) ^^ so is there going to be a war between the two countries? two sections of the country, rather? i'll stop here^^
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