Title: Needs Work
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2004 12:55 CST
Comment/Review:
Sorry to say this, but I could hardly get through the first few paragraphs. When writing fiction, it is important to make new paragraphs for new quotes; otherwise it's just confusing. Also, it is necessary to include the setting: describe the place and time, perhaps also how the characters look, what they might be doing (maybe some background information about the characters). In this way your readers can picture where each scene takes place and better see what is going on. I hope this is helpful. If you have any questions or need some help, my email is vegges_mate@yahoo.com
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