Reviewed By: Caphriel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2004 13:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like the premise of the story. It's a good idea with a lot of potential. The narration seemed a little rushed in some places, but it wasn't too bad. It seems like a good start, but there doesn't seem to be much more to it so far than a good start. The one thing this story needs more than anything else is more chapters.
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