| "One Good Deed" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: great story
Reviewed By: Trynia Merin On: November 17, 2007 19:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Great original characters here. Also I enjoyed the interaction between Khri and Junior. They both bonded in a way that made sense and wasn't OOC with Junior. Her influence on him makes sense in the DBZ universe. I would have liked to know more about Khri's race and history but I'm sure that will come forward in the sequal.
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2005 15:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is an excellent fic. Khri is a very interesting OC, with talents and objectives of her own. The world you've put her in is fascinating and I hope to find out more about her background and culture in the next part. Your writing style is very clean and easy to read. Telling the *story* is paramount. I knew from your comments about style in a thread at the Salon I would probably enjoy your stuff and I was right.
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Reviewed By: zaitcev [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 00:35 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
The best feature of the story is the fast paced action. Needless to say, all technical aspects are done well. The only small disappointment was that the story does not stand alone sufficiently, because of the open-ended epilogue. I saw a couple of mistakes that beta should have caught, like "The shield managed TO deflectED the blast," but nothing to spoil the enjoyment. I had half a mind to nitpick on security tactics and casual connections but it really would be nitpicking; there was nothing to overload suspension of disbelief.
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegeta On: February 17, 2005 13:23 CST
Comment/Review:
Finally read this one. I loved seeing chibi Piccolo. It's not something portrayed in the fandom world a lot but this is how I would have imagined him. Well done.
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