"Pirate's Blessing" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: summary Reviewed By: Keih [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2008 15:12 CDT Comment/Review: i haven't read it; there's only one chapter up. but the summary, it makes no sense? to me at least. i think you should rewrite the summary. also, when your a writer, it's not about the reviews it's about the writing.
| Title: ^_^ Sugoi! Reviewed By: Kathrine Reverie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2004 17:23 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: The crew which had before been taking its time now scurried out of bedrolls and hammocks in such speed that none had before laid eye's on. Change 'Eye's' to 'eyes' "Oh, do be quiet Leo', it's only dawn. We have plenty of time to kill." A voice behind Leofare mad him whirl, reaching for the dagger he hid up his sleeve. Mad to made. ^_^ "Standing behind him was one of the younger member's of the crew. the ' " ' Isn't nessicary. He said in a motionless voice. Me thinks you meant 'Emotionless" Leofare knew that if her got Dem mad, the boy would gut him faster than in the blink of an eye. i think you meant 'he' rather than her ^_^ I'd also sugest changing 'mad' to angry, 'dem mad' sounds like baby talk for 'them mad' just might wipe of that protective coat of dirt, you slimbags." 'Off' ^_^ I love the atmosphere so far. I had a whole lot more written but it deleted it'sself X_X
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