| "Night" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Sai_Saishi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2006 07:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was cute ^^ I liked the way you started this as well, it flowed very nicely ^^ I must say, I don't get to read too many stories written in present tence.... and when I do they're suauly not very well done... (such as switching back and forth between present and past....). You wrote this very nicely ^^ I felt that the ending was especialy effective ^^ nice job *-^
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Reviewed By: Yu-ni Germany [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 12:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
Sounds really interesting. But its a little bit short, hm?
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Reviewed By: Kiona On: July 13, 2005 09:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your idea but since it's pretty early in the fic, I am insufficiently intrigued. Your grammar is incorrect for a narrative/recount structure and that detracts from the overall enjoyment factor.
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Reviewed By: DemonandGoddess(lazy) On: June 15, 2005 23:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
Intriguing... looking forward to more.
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