InuYasha Fan Fiction ❯ Surrounded Yet Alone ❯ Chapter 11

[ Y - Young Adult: Not suitable for readers under 16 ]

I just found out that I could find out how many people view my story. And i'm not upset but more along the lines of livid that I have had my story viewed over five hundred and fifty times and only six reviews (I just thought my story wasn't appealing much). Thank you to who have reviewed. But I guess people are too dame lazy, right Omocron and lala su? I will not as a writer make people to review for updates. And I know it has been a while since I last updated and i'm sorry for that but what's your excuse. I will make it crystal clear when the story is over for those of you who are unsure when it will end. I'm doing this as practice, I'm working on a book that I plan to publish but that's a long way to go (I mean come on i'm only a 17 yr old girl in High School trying to pass my classes, what do you expect). This is my chance to improve but to do so I need to know what I'm doing wrong. The reviews help me learn. I will work on my spelling and grammar if that will help silverpatdog2001, Kagura_Yasha . I have never had a flame so I don't know how I would react (hopefully I won't cry or get angry). But for me when I find that some one has reviewed my story I feel all happy (something that doesn't usually happen much). Thank you gumi-sama, jeannie for being my first and second reviewers there is no way that you could ever know how happy you had made me, all of you thank you.
You might not know but I fell like I could relate most to her (Sango (my version)), she is I. although I have never done as she I have on many occasions thought about it and there I times I would hold the blade in my hands but I would always put it down thinking of how my mother and father would react how my friends would treat me differently. I don't think I would be able to bear it. friends and family treating me as some fragile ordainment putting me up on the top of the tree so as not to be touched or bumped into. But the top of the tree sways most in the wind and it may be a long way down, but I'd sure to hit all the branches on the way only to be shattered into a million pieces when I hit the cold hard ground. Call me a geek a wuss what ever it is not a lie. If I had any guts I wouldn't be here right now. I would have been long gone way before high school.
Now back to the story, I have a question for you one of the six reviews that I have had, had mentioned about changing the title and I like that idea. My story was only going to be six short chapters. But that's not what happens with writing (at least not for me) the story takes you and uses you to tell the story. You are but a puppet telling a tale. And the tale controls you. So before the story took over, the title would have been perfect; but as of now the title is not befitting any more. Kagura_Yasha had suggested Surrounded And Alone. So what do you think of Surrounded Yet Alone?