Original Stories Fan Fiction / Original Poetry Fan Fiction ❯ OLD vs. NEW ❯ Its all about him ( Chapter 3 )

[ P - Pre-Teen ]

i like the anime and manga called Bleach. This character i write about in my poem is not a character i made up. But the poem i wrote about him I made up all by myself.
And when i watch Bleach I just can't control myself. I get very emotional my friends say all the time.
Well its this one character I like, because he is really strong.
So i thought of writting this about him. Sorry for it being so long, but i hope you like. All comments are welcome.

Miscellaneous: Original Stories Fan Fiction / Original Poetry Fan Fiction | Genre(s): Fantasy / Drama / Mystery | Type: Poetry | Uploaded On: 02.12.2008 | Updated On: 02.12.2008 | Pages: 7 | Words: 3.5K | Visits: 192 | Status: Completed

Old Version

THIS MAN

This man that I seen

No not of my dreams

But a character I know

And will share with you all

All stained in red

Who blood is this

Does it matter really?

No cause they're all dead

Who did this you ask

Oh just wait and see

He grins with a smile

Very wicked and tall

For him to take off that eye patch

They have to be strong

Cut him if you can

If not then scatter

Pain he can not feel

Only pure ecstasy is there

It doesn't matter who wins or lose

The fun in it all is him ripping them to shreds

Now can you see?

It's KENPACHI

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Fixed Version

THIS MAN

This man that I've seen

No not of my dreams

But a character I know

And will share with you all

All stained in red

Whose blood is this?

It doesn't matter

Because they're all deceased

Who did this you ask

Oh just wait and see

He grins with a smile

Very wicked and tall

For him to take off his eye patch

They have to be strong

Cut him if you can

If not then scatter

Pain he can not feel

Only pure ecstasy is there

It doesn't matter who wins or loses

The fun in it all is him ripping them to shreds

Now can you see?

It's KENPACHI

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New Version

Tamed Wolf

This man that I've seen

No not of my dreams

But in a world that's not my own.

Is this character I know

And will share with you all

His sense of direction maybe off

But the path he walks is bold

With a powerful walk he strolls

Like a wild beast

He walks the streets

Look into his eyes if you're not scared

And tell me what you see

Is a wolf ready to strike his prey?

And that prey just maybe you

So you might want to scurry away

Because the eye patch that he wears

Only prolongs the adversary life just a little

To make it more fun

To relish in the rival screams

While their soul melts away

Taking their last breathe they'll remember

Their screams, his laughter

What he carries on his shoulder is not a pet

It's his heart that he carries close

But please don't mistake it as his weakness

For she carries a mean streak of her own

Some may think the pink headed girl dreams of candy

But secretly she dreams of delightful screams

That the foe may suppress deep with in

That's why she smiles in her sleep

He has control

But is wildly insane

He tames himself

And needs no one else

Because him and her is one

A bond that can't be broke.

Some may try those foolish sheep.

Will only cut their self

Leaving trace of blood

Like a chain it'll lead him right to them

Find a maze it might help

Unless he blows it up

His voice is demanding

So listen very closely

Let the words travel to every ear

So their brain can comprehend

Obey every rule he commands

For he is mighty

And all are weak.

You will devote yourself to Kenpachi

For the world everyone know

He makes it his own

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The mixed version (some added and deleted)

This Tamed Man

This man that I've seen

No not of my dreams

But in a world that's not my own

Is this character I know

And will share with you all

His sense of direction maybe off

But the path he walks is bold

With a powerful walk he strolls

Like a wild beast

He walks the streets

Look into his eyes if you're not scared

And tell me what you see

Is a wolf ready to strike his prey?

And that prey just maybe you

So you might want to scurry away

Because the eye patch that he wears

Only prolongs the adversary life just a little

To make it more fun

To relish in the rival screams

What he carries on his shoulder is not a pet

It's his heart that he carries close

But please don't mistake it as his weakness

For she carries a mean streak of her own

Some may think the pink headed girl dreams of candy

But secretly she dreams of delightful screams

That the foe may suppress deep with in

He tames himself

And needs no one else

Because him and her is one

A bond that can't be broke.

Some may try those foolish sheep.

Will only cut their self

His voice is demanding

So listen very closely

Let the words travel to every ear

So their brain can comprehend

Obey every rule he commands

For he is mighty

And all are weak.

The world everyone know

He makes it his own

All stained in red

Whose blood is this?

It doesn't matter

Because they're all deceased

Who did this you ask

Oh just wait and see

He grins with a smile

Very wicked and tall

For him to take off his eye patch

They have to be strong

For it only make him interested more

Cut him if you can

If not then scatter

Pain he can not feel

Only pure ecstasy is there

It doesn't matter who wins or loses

The fun in it all is him ripping them to shreds

Now can you see?

It's KENPACHI

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Sorry for it being so long. So which do you like? I couldn't make up my mind to which two I should put up so I put them all.

I hope you enjoyed I had a lot of fun with this. I hope you had fun reading it. I think my favorite is Tamed Wolf. Sorry if the title is crappy. But I kinda like them.

Also the way I write my poems is also the way I think or pause when I read it. So sorry if the form of my poem is wrong.