Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Chibi Halo [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 22:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your piece to FFARG. You have a good start to your story so far by taking a good Kim Possible episode and playing the "What if" game with it. However, I did notice that your story could do with an extra pair of eyes going over it before posting. There were times when you left out apostrophies from words clearly showing possession. I also noticed a missing word in a scentence. Plus, I noticed at times you like to use the numerical version of numbers in scentences. In formal writing it's best to use the alphabetical version of numbers. You have a good handle on the characters and a good handle on action sequences. Again with a second pair of eyes going over the fic before posting you can have an even better story. Thanks once again for submitting your work to FFARG.
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