Title: a bit OOC
Reviewed By: mylovemiroku [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 03:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I kinda like how it's going, even though the characters are a little OOC (Out of Character). Hatsumi's character is almost better, because I always hope that she'll be more outspoken than in the manga. Ryoki is a little more perverted and almost creepy, although I liked the last scene with him here. I recommend that you read another Hot Gimmick fanfic here about Ryoki's thoughts, I forgot the name. Mrs. T is a little more blunt than usual, in the manga she is more discrete, while still getting the same message across. It kinda gives her polite/classy/bitchiness. I hope you read the rest of the series soon, it might help with this. Overall though, I praise you for actually writing this.
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