| "Mind and Spirit" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Annon On: December 11, 2007 01:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I have to say is wow I kinda wished there was a lemon in it I know you kept it simple but for what it is... This is the best Mononoke I've read most likely this will stay on top for more years then carter has pills for. Untill another time Later!!!
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Title: Wow!
Reviewed By: BlackScarlet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2007 13:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All i can say is wow! Ive only just seen princess mononoke (I know, i know im film challenged) and it is now my most favorite film ever.I loved how youre story didnt just rush into things and how you kept them pretty much in character to the way i imagine them. Some of the sneces were very touching and i was sad when it ended! *faves* :D
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Title: GoOD!
Reviewed By: silver_wind_kitsue [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very, VERY good!
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Title: shisouikari@gmail.com
Reviewed By: Rixii On: August 14, 2006 05:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to agree with the first reviewer about the gramatical errors. The diction improved after the first couple chapters and though there were multiple mistakes in puncuation it wasn't quite enough to take over the story which is good. A beta reader would solve most of this. I think you did, for the most part, a very decent job of keeping them true to their original characters. I really enjoyed this story
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Title: Love It!
Reviewed By: Lori On: April 01, 2006 17:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is by far one of the best Fanfics for Princess Mononoke and I enjoyed it so! I love how you extended the events or their love life and the perfect balance between romance and action. Love It! Its wonderful and the ending was very sweet in its most "innocent" way. hehe, It was great but the only errors I found were in grammar and spelling but other than that-Perfect! :] Please do continue on with this! I beg of You! lol, its utterly amazing how everything blends in together. When you do update or continue on to this please email me at: lorelei35@hotmail.com Please and Thank You!
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Title: FFRG Review - Chapter 2
Reviewed By: hostilecrayon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2005 19:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is a very nice piece of fiction and I enjoy the concept behind it. The plot has plenty of room to unfold and grow, and the characterization is decent. You have some grammatical errors, nothing that a beta couldn't fix, but that isn't your main problem. The main issue with this story is your style. It's partly your choice of diction, but even more so than that, it's your sentance structure. You use a very simple sentance structure for most of the chapter, and it becomes almost monotonous. To fix this, combine some sentances with semi-colons and rearrange them a little, paying attention to the diction you're using. A good thesaurus could help you with this a little. I suggest reading it out loud to someone else. You or the other person will most likely pick up on the areas that either need to be rearranged or changed. Also, you should leave a space between each paragraph or when new diologue begins. The extra space makes it much easier on the reader, as I found myself losing my place often because it is condensed. Nice work, I look forward to future submissions. Thank you for submitting to FFRG.
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