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| "Zero: Soul of a hero" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Sanakudou [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2009 04:44 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I was really happy to stumble across this! Just read the first chapter and loved this! :D I'm glad to find someone write about the Elf Wars, its well written, I'll defiantly finish reading this!
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2005 19:41 CST
Comment/Review:
Okay, I'm unfamiliar with the series, but I'll give this a shot. Tostart, the battle sceane seems a little dragged on, but that can be excused. I didn't see any real problems with grammer or spelling, though the character you have self destruct at the end of this chapter you might want to give him a few more sceanes. You want the readers to feel bad about his death, but when they hear about this random guy that decided to sacrifice himself they go "Oh isn't that nice for our side. Stopped that bad guy in their tracks." With little to no regard for the character in question. Otherwise this was well written and thanks for submitting to FFARG.
| Title: FFARG review, Ch1
Reviewed By: SisiXIII [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 16:39 CDT
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First, you should double-space your paragraphs. Second if you explain a bit on what reploids are it would help anyone who doesn't know the series you're working with as well as you. Describing more on what the war is about, how it started, how things are going in the war and whose side your characters are on would be helpful to your cause. Since you're working with some complicated mechanics that don't exactly have places on earth in our time quite yet. You can basically bluff your way with these as long as you make it sound good, more description on what these things will do is all to the positive. Overall, you sort of make both X and Zero into gary-stu's with their wounds and all you really need is one character to have wounds he doesn't show. The other being hypocritical about his own wounds is cliché and just bad. To sum it up, your grammar is pretty good and you describe scenes fairly well. Just work a bit on back story a bit and those stu's (A Gary-stu is a male Mary-sue) Keep writing and submitting to the FFARG.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2005 15:15 CDT
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Thank you for submitting this fic to FFARG. You've chosen an interesting point in the timeline to stick this fic. Hopefully, Capcom won't release a game that bridges the X and Zero series and render this fic obsolete. I haven't played any of the Megaman X games, and only the first Zero game, so I don't know the characters all that well. But you gave them pretty well-defined personalities, and keep them in character for that. I look forward to the rest of this fic whenever you write it.
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