| "Warped Digital Reality" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: Nice but here are some ideas.
Reviewed By: Daniel14541 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 21:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to agree with Holy Sasami about your story but i have a few suggestions for you. 1.Have the digidestined find out a little later about him being form a diffrent universe."for example have hikari play a dvd of the first digmon movie and have Tai catch him watching it and wonder how he got a tape of him that early in his life" 2.Have him able to fuse with his digimon. 3.Bring in a best friend for Hikari to talk to from his universe."Girlfriend or just friend"
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Title: Excelent
Reviewed By: M allrat On: December 28, 2003 04:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I only write comments about stories that I like and I've been up most of the night reading your stories. Only a good story can keep me up at night so you are worthy of my praise and envy. Envy because I can only hope to write a fanfic as good as you and a lot of these other writers, but I won't give up. I'm almost done with the first chapter of my story and the hardest part was just getting started; but reading other writer's stories keeps me hangin on. I kinda went off the subject for a minute and I want to say the way you had Hikari open up Eric about why he attacked that digimon was very good. It shows that your not afraid to use real life problems I was able to keep up with your story and I can't wait to see what happens next. By the way, when the heck is Davis gonna catch a break and get a girlfriend. Keep the stories comming.
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Reviewed By: Holy Sasami On: August 06, 2003 09:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well im no expert on writing style but i had no trouble understanding the story or the plot and it seemed to flow realy well so i guess the writing style was superb. Spelling and Grammar are another thing that i wouldnt want to go into to much but i dont remember seeing anything wrong with it. Originality and creativity are somethings that i think were great so far i cant go into to much depth yet because 4 chapters just isnt enough to get a real idea but from what ive seen so far its looking realy good. So that brings me to Enjoyment Factor, now ill just say now that i have this thing with self-insert fanfics. I love them. I dont know why but i do so i can say yeah a 10 is a good rating, i would rather say 12 but i guess 10 will have to do. :)
Now for overall rating if i didnt think it was a 10 then i wouldnt have read past the first chapter so yeah i think 10 is a realy good rating. Hope you get around to writing more on this story soon |
