| "Loveless Fascination" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] |
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Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2005 05:46 CDT
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Good grief that was HOT! Oh my! Wonderful work Audra.
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: July 25, 2005 08:22 CDT
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Is it wrong for me to be jealous of Bulma right now? Ooh, the sweet dreams I can have tonight. ^_^ The descriptions were wonderful and I didn't see any glaring error. The only thing I would suggest is write MORE!!
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Reviewed By: desertblue On: July 24, 2005 21:51 CDT
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write more please I don't care what happens next but something has to happen thankyou anyway if you don't
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Reviewed By: Mely On: July 24, 2005 18:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great lemon! I like the fact that Bulma is the center of all of their attention. Previous stories that I've read are V/G/B and Goku is the focus. This story was very well written. I'm sure the person you wrote this story for is very pleased. I hope to see more posted stories by you. Maybe you can have Bulma in threesomes with other DBZ characters.
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Title: Loveless Fascination
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2005 15:46 CDT
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.>. OM WOW I'M I'M SPEACHLESS........^^ UPDATE NOW YOU HEAR ME.... ok now i'm back to normal...great story i want more....
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2005 12:37 CDT
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!!!!! Weeeee! !!!!!!!!! Nice little moments--like Yamcha's thoughts. His being reluctant and turned on and then not caring that the "alien's" hands somehow landed on his. Great descriptions of pure physicality. "Lied" should be "lay" both times but I didn't mind :P And oh yes, I loved it how Vegeta was in charge of the whole shebang. He just would be, that alien! 8-D Can't wait to see where you're taking this. This was a PRIMO smut chapter.
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Reviewed By: christabel1961 On: July 24, 2005 10:53 CDT
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Wow, wonderful. I can't wait to see where you take this great story. christabeleve
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Reviewed By: Caralin Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2005 10:20 CDT
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Hurrah! A new Bulma/Vegeta story to sink my teeth into...well it does include Yamcha...but I think I can put up with him for the sake of a good read. I can't wait for the romping to begin! *Praying this does not turn into yaoi between Vegeta and Yamcha* My evil mind sees Bulma and Vegeta having way too much fun to even remember Yamcha is supposed to be joining them...heh...heh...can't blame them...
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Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: VegetasBabysMama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2005 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The whole concept is intriguing. I never imagined, fantasized, daydreamed about Y/B/V having threesome. LOL. But I thought 'Why not?' so I checked it out. To be honest, I thought the whole idea would disgust me (mainly because I'm a big V/B fan), but I figured that the writing would have a major factor in that. If it's well written, then I'm all for it. Some people would have just thrown them in a bed together and that's it, but I think you presented the whole idea very well. There's nothing wrong with, you know, wanting to spice up ones sex life. Haha. I thought Yamcha would rather do it with two girls than share Bulma with another man, but then again, that wouldn't make a very good story. So anyway, I want to see how the story will go, so I ask -nicely- for another chapter.
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Reviewed By: debbiechannotlogged in On: July 22, 2005 14:56 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah, it took me a while to get to this after you posted it! I was running fever and I wanted to be in my right mind when I reviewed. I... LOVE... IT!!!!! Not only is it IC and plausible, it's smooth, well-written, and all jaunty and interesting. I was only disappointed that there wasn't a hint of smut already :-D The wind-up is slow and fascinating, though. I'm dying to see where you take this!!!! Weeeee! Naked Yamcha and Naked Vegeta. What a lucky Bulma! And oh yes, as always, your sense of humor is stellar. This has great pacing.
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Reviewed By: Jeanna On: July 21, 2005 19:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hurry up and Update woman lol I loved it and the good stuff hasant started yet yahoo... cool like you hand can only do so much LMAO! UPDATE NSB >:)
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: July 21, 2005 15:21 CDT
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You know, I was curious how the topic would come up and how Vegeta would handle it. I'm so intrigued to know what will happen next. BTW: "and he knew she how she felt", I believe this is a typo, remove the first "she". Otherwise, I didn't see any errors. *thumbs up*
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Reviewed By: Mely On: July 21, 2005 14:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have captured my attention! Very different from other stories that are out there. I hope you will update this story in the future.
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Reviewed By: Goatnjn On: July 20, 2005 23:32 CDT
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I got to hand it to you, you've come up with something origninal. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: desertblue On: July 20, 2005 21:24 CDT
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Please write more I have never read a story that would these three together but it is a really good idea and i would like to see what happens
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