| "To Begin Again" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] |
Reviewed By: Totally Kawaii [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2007 22:50 CST
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OMG, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Don't separate Kag and Inu!!!!!! Brilliant story and looking forward to your sequel - in fact, I'm off to it right now. Toodles.
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Reviewed By: nancey3 On: August 29, 2006 23:46 CDT
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I was enjoying your story, I read up to chapter 10. It was written well for the most part. But I honestly don't think I will continue, the second the others went to her time, I lost interest. I think it's too hard believe that they would just get lucky and have the well except them, when in the past it wouldn't. Plus Sango would never be able to live in present day. I can't see myself finishing. But I'll let you know if I do, who knows maybe you'll make it easier to believe. As I said, it was well written. Still room to improve, but I could see an improvement from one chapter to the next.
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Reviewed By: lockjaw On: August 29, 2006 23:24 CDT
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Uh, there is going to be some type of an epilogue, I imagine.
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Reviewed By: dazed On: August 29, 2006 12:14 CDT
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Well damn you know how to throw a twist that surprises everyone. I loved the story up until the end.
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Reviewed By: disappointed On: August 29, 2006 11:55 CDT
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This is unacceptable. Though I admit you are the author so you have all rights to end it however you want to. but did you really have to give it such an angsty ending? The fin for now prompts me to believe there will be a sequel, so I will have to wait for that to come out.
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Reviewed By: crystal strawberry On: August 29, 2006 02:13 CDT
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............what the hell!!! How can you end it like that?! But what's going to happen now? You are going to do a follow up on this, right?......How could you leave it like that (throwing heavy bookcases at you) rhey were suppoesed to end up happy together. (Throwing myself on the floor and punding the hardwood floor.) Reunite them please..damn kami's!!!
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Reviewed By: thinking On: August 27, 2006 02:38 CDT
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I just rememered the gypsy fortuneteller telling Kagome and Inuyasha their fortunes. For some reason I can see Kagome's father being the one who wants to separate Inuyasha from Kagome.I really do not like that man or his hyperactive wife.There's just something there that does not make them seem trustful.
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Reviewed By: AyealisKomori [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2006 12:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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must update! :D :3
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Title: YAY
Reviewed By: KAZ1167 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2006 23:25 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS STORY! YAY! please update soon.
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Reviewed By: fire maiden On: May 20, 2006 14:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update i am getting anxious!
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Reviewed By: fire maiden On: May 17, 2006 21:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really luv this story so much! i like it when inuyasha finally got over 'kikyo'.and wats with kagomes father coming back all of a sudden. o i just have so much quetions.but please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Aozora Sky On: January 07, 2006 00:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it!! It's soo cool, but one thing is really racking my nerves...that women that told Inuyasha his future...that was really bad! But it can't be as bad if Kagome's future was really good could it? Well, great work so far. Update soon!!
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Reviewed By: steelfether11 On: December 15, 2005 08:53 CST
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cliffffffyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!! you better contine soon or else bum bum bummmm!!!
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Reviewed By: Steelfether11 On: November 12, 2005 08:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
*this is an exallent fic. please continue it as soon as possible.
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2005 21:31 CST
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I'm glad you are re-posting this. You've got a good start in chapter 1. And is it my imagination or did the rating change? I'm nuts...
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2005 10:02 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Your story is good however you have serious problems with the structure of your paragraphs. Only one person should speak in a paragragh. A new paragraph should be made every time: 1) a different person speaks or thinks, 2) someone thinks about or reacts to something someone else said, 3) a new action occurs or a new subject is broached, 4) when a different point of view occurs, 5) when the location, setting, or time changes. If you read popular fiction (paperback novels), take a moment to look at the paragraph structure in one of them. Learn from that example. Also, continue to place a blank line between your paragraphs. White space on the computer screen makes it easier to read the text and people will thank you for it. I like your story so far and I hope you do not think of this review as a flame. Telling a good story is not enough; you must also understand the mechanics of writing well. I wish you luck with your story. ---And a final comment. MediaMiner defaults its settings to only allow signed reviews. If you manually change your user settings to allow reviews from persons not signed in, I believe you may receive more reviews.
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Reviewed By: DragonChic [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2005 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story i really like the last chapter keep writing update soon
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Reviewed By: QuestionableIntentions [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2005 22:59 CDT
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i absolutely adore this story!! it's bloody fantastic!! xD i love how inuyasha is acting, and the thing with her father makes for good drama. lol. however, one thing confused me. in the last chapter, was inu wearing or not wearing a bandana...you mentioned that he was and wasn't. "noticed he'd already placed a bandana on his head" (or something like that) and then you go to say "kagome tweaked his ears because he'd forgotten to wear a cap or a bandana" lol. but great great great great great job!! and i really hope you update soon! ^_^
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Title: To Begin Again
Reviewed By: imnosuper(wo)man On: August 30, 2005 16:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story. The characters are in character, the relationships are sweet, and I really like the addition/complication of Kagome's dad: it's interesting. In short, the story adds to the universe without making the characters OC, it's sweet with making me gag, and it's creative. And it makes puppies smile. Please keep writing!
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Title: F.F.R.G
Reviewed By: Forlorn Essence [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2005 18:24 CDT
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I found this to be a very attractive fanfiction. The characters are well-rounded and I didn't find a lot of OOC. The detail was intact and not overly-done in my opinion. It is clear to me that you have put a lot of effort into this fiction and it clearly shows from the detail of the storyline to the progression of the characters. Subtle grammatical and spelling errors but nothing drastic. And excellent fanfiction. -F.E*
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Title: FFARG: Review of Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2005 07:08 CDT
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Your hard work really shows. This first part of "To Begin Again" was really very well-written with nary a grammar or spelling error that I could see. I also thought that the descriptiveness was great, not too much, not too little. It was just enough to keep the writing on a certain level while not dragging the plot. Overall, entertaining and well-written. Thank you for submitting to FFARG! :cDee
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