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| "Dreams, Nightmares, and Reality" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: fifth one
Reviewed By: Biggest anime fan 3 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2005 08:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello there! This is well written. The language is good, and the story is even batter! But I would have given it a higher rating if it wasn't so jumbled up.I mean, it's just one big paragraph.And it's such a shame, cuz it's really good! Plus, how could you expect 5 whole reviews, though this is the first chapter (and a comparatively short one) while you're a ralatively new author (er...do you have any other stories?) Anyway, a good story will attract reviews, no matter how long that takes, so be patient the first few chapters. This site is very hard to get reviews in. BELIEVE ME! If you develope it well, people will eat it up, and I think this can be a great story (I wouldn't have bothered to review otherwise.) I usually don't critisize, but your hunger for reviews so early on pushed me to it, and I completed your requirement at the same time XD So I like it. I do! Do you ever go back to the page after you've uploaded to see if it looks right? (I usually do, to make sure all is well.) You need to, especially in the begenning, as in now. If you attracted readers in the begenning, they might be willing to overlook how messy it might come out later. Usually, when I open a chap to read I don't bother reading it if it looks like yours does. But the story is cute, and romantic -sighhhh- so please, it could be even better, I'm sure of it! I hope I didn't make you mad, or annoyed you, cuz I was trying to critisize you (both of you) constructively... CONTINUE! I beg you T-T
| Reviewed By: stix On: September 22, 2005 20:15 CDT
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i loved this story. it was so great. please add more to this story soon.
| Reviewed By: debbi On: September 03, 2005 15:06 CDT
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more would be nice, update!
| Title: whoa!
Reviewed By: me On: August 31, 2005 10:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm sort of with D.N.A.R. on this one - MORE! and i know there are people who are not reviewing who would be interested (lurkers are such pansies- it's anonymous for goodness sake!) please post more, i like where this is headed
| Title: D.N.A.R.
Reviewed By: unamed On: August 12, 2005 19:37 CDT
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YOU HAD BETTER WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I WILL KILL YOU IF YOU DON'T!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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