| "Enough is Enough" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: Technical error
Reviewed By: whimsy007 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2008 23:30 CST
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I'm enjoying this story so far, but in chapter 4 you make a significant technical error. Almost all current rifle cartridges, especially those used in sniper rifles, are supersonic so InuYasha wouldn't have heard the blast before the bullet arrived. Does InuYasha have some other form of danger sense such as "feeling" that someone is watching him (usually a subconscious reaction to various visual and aural clues)? Perhaps he smells the youkai which puts him on his guard. My impression is that very few othery types of youkai can match an inuyoukai or inuhanyou for sense of smell. Also, gunpowder hasn't used in bullets for over 100 years. Modern propellants are primarily based on nitrocellulose. I don't want to seem too picky, but the little details often are critical to providing the necessary suspension of disbelief.
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2006 15:15 CDT
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ooh and can she somehow be related to inuyasha?
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 23:07 CST
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OMFKG!!!! *squeals* exactly as i thought it would be! i love you! *hugs tightly*i'm so happy! cuz today i found my friends their on the net! yayness!!!! ok ok her family history? well lets see she was abondened as a child beacause of her hanyou ness and only one person cares for her which is her dad, she lives alone for now her dad visits once and awhile and since she lives alone she has a lot of nekos, which sakaki is like in love with (my own imput) other than that i can't think about any other family stuff
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 22:22 CST
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right i believe that her weponry is two daggers and a small pistol her she strongly believes in karma (destiny/fate) and believes her love shall come one day...for her side i think she'll be with fluffy ^_^ and...maybe...if you could...can she be a frend of sakaki? please? i liked this chappie it's a bit counfuseing since i had to re read the last chappie...and if i may correct one grammatical error it's neko ko neko... thats how you spell it ^^ alright thats enought for this review ^^ see yah next chappie!
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2006 10:29 CST
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omg! i love your chappie so what? now miro and sango are twins? thats a bit counfuseing...any way i'm thinking about asking you to put mia in the story. ok with you?
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 16:11 CST
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yay!!!! i been updated for! i won't be on for awhile cuz i'm grounded...byez!
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2005 21:52 CST
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hi! read your story and love it! update soon?)
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Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2005 00:26 CDT
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Nice concept, decent characterisation. Your grammar and spelling is mediocre at best, so I'd really suggest using spell-check before you post a chapter. Also, I notice that when there's a sequence of continuous action you make a 'run-on paragraph', one so long the reader can get lost halfway through and have difficulty finding where they got lost at, especially if they look away; when you see a paragraph doing that, try to find points where it could be split into two paragraphs, just to prevent reader confusion. As far as plot goes, I don't see too much of one, but this fic seems like a 'crazy stuff happens, be amused' fic anyway, which is good in its own right. I think it'll be most amusing once he starts interacting with some of the more interesting(see: insane) Azumanga Daioh characters...
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Title: Hi
Reviewed By: Amberlee On: September 22, 2005 06:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi just like to say i love this story and um my user name is kagome2001, kagome12_2001 or kagome122001 can you read my story it called THe WELL
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Title: I love u
Reviewed By: Amberlee On: September 21, 2005 01:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your a trip you mad a Azumanga Daiho and Inuyasha fanfic I love you those are my 2 favorite anime ever buhbye
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