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| "My Empire of Dirt" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: Ryoko-onee [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2005 16:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the lyrics in the beginning. Love the song but I never knew the full lyrics. XD I'd stop at "whoops there goes gravity".lol In any case I really liked this, though I worry for Zechs. That fools is gonna do just the opposite of what Relena said if it kills him. >,< I wonder though if that other guy (forgot his name) will stop him before he can leave though. He doesn't seem the type to let his guard down around Zechs.
| Reviewed By: Ryoko-onee [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2005 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another awesome chapter! Man is Zechs going to make it? o_o Poor guy's bleeding a fountain over there. I really hope Greg will let Noin take him to Sally. He needs it. @_@
| Reviewed By: Ryoko-onee [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2005 22:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man I feel horribly for Zechs. Not only does he have Yuy on his back, but now this? Oh man even I shivered when Heero was talking down to his agent. -shudder- That was too scary. Can't wait for the next chapter.
| Title: FFRG Chapter 1 Review
Reviewed By: hostilecrayon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2005 21:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
To back up what Dee-Chan said, I also noticed quite a few missing words, and it threw me off a bit. However, your diction is very strong. Your characterization is dead on, and it was quite interesting seeing how hardship had changed Noin. You have a way with flow, and I didn't find myself getting bored even through political explanations. I do think your descriptions may be a bit too strong in places, and at some points, I was a little confused, most blatantly in the first two paragraphs. I would suggest rearranging some of the commas to make things clearer. Your plot seems solid, and the cliffhanger was nicely executed. Very nice work. Thank you for submitting to FFRG. I look forward to reading future submissions.
| Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2005 15:01 CDT
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OOH...
| Title: FFARG: Mesh Review of Prog and Chp Uno
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 12:26 CDT
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As far I could see, the prologue didn't have any errors, but in chapter one there were a few missing words, where I guess a storm of inspiration hit your keyboard through your fingers. :-P Clearly, this story has a thought-out plot, which combined with this great grasp of grammar-spelling and writing, will take it far. Something I especially enjoyed was the information about the character's post-war lives. The relationships were predictable but you wrote everything so well, so freshly, I was just never bored during the course of these two chapters. I really hope you update soon.
| Reviewed By: picaresque [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2005 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I noticed you didn't have any reviews yet and thought I'd be the first. It's a terrific story and plot, it really is. I hope you update soon though because I hate cliffhanger susupense. Keep them coming okay?
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