"Revelations About the Birds and the Bees..." Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
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Reviewed By: Anime-Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2008 04:36 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I enjoyed it alot. I love the way you write it sounds professional like it could really be from a book or something of the sort. I do have to say though that there were some misspellings and the tenses were sometimes wrong. You would write in the past tense and the next sentence would be in the present. Try to stick to one tense in the future. I also have to say that it felt like you had some loose ends in the story. You didn't have them discuss some of their problems other than the I love you part. The problems they were having in your story, such as the talking to one another, and their past I felt were alil unanswered. Over all I think you made a very REAL romance story and I liked it alot more than the "we have no problems" romance stories you see alot of. You're story did make me smile and I would like to leave you with saying that you did a great job. I throughly enjoyed it and I believe that you should write more romance stories because we need more like yours.
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Title: AWWW???? Reviewed By: kaye_kay28 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 15:21 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: i love the lil' increasingly sarcastic tone the storyteller takes in the story. it's flippin HILARIOUS! really, it is. ;] and gosh. i juss got finished reading chapter 4 right now & the author's note at the bottom explaining some of the excerpts. i looked up "and you, helen" by edward thomas and juss gosh. that's not sappy at all cus if itwere i'm sure i would have gagged. that was juss plain cute. :] cute as hell. and i loved it. i thought i was adorable. and i think they way you portray howl & sophie is juss so unique & adorable & i love the incredibly unique situations you've put them in. i simply have not read a scenario like the one you have created! keep writing! :D i'm enjoying myself completely! i love this story!!! :D
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Reviewed By: serenity101 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2006 15:46 CDT Comment/Review: HOw sweet. This is a review for the last 5 chapters. I kinda got the idea of the last chapter. I loved this story. i think you should make a sequelbut that's up to you.
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Reviewed By: Angel_of_Elements [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2006 16:30 CDT Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: This fic is absolutely awesome. I really love the last chapter. It was funny (made me smile)and I just loved it.
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Title: Spectacular Job Reviewed By: Hamadryad [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2006 16:01 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I just wanted to congratulate you on this wonderful piece you've written. I was particularly impressed that you chose to use Diana Wynne Jones' book as the basis rather than Miyazaki's popularized film version of the story. (Both were quite enjoyable, but I'm personally a bigger fan of the written version.) Your portrayal Howl and Sophie as well as of Megan, Calcifer, Michael, Fanny, and others was perfectly in keeping with all their characters. The interactions between these family members were both realistic and humorous, a hard mix to accomplish. The dynamics of Howl and Sophie's relationship were equally enjoyable. Sophie was still nosy and bossy and Howl was still a vain slither-outer, but together they were trying to forge a more intimate understanding of each other to begin their married life. I think you did well in allowing Calcifer to mediate between the two in the story without making him into some sort of oracle that can solve everyone's problem and immediately reveal the complex emotions of one partner to the other with perfect clarity. His role was important, yes, but it was not blown out of proportion either. There were several parts which showed a unique, creative take on matters: Mari's comment on her parent's nightly activities, Howl's health problems, the multiple literary references, and the marriage consummation scene among many others. Kudos to you on the lemon by the way, very tasteful... very naughty. Your fanfic flowed seamlessly from ending pages of the novel into the newest chapter of Howl and Sophie's lives, and I can think of no higher praise than that. May the spiders long survive Sophie's cleaning frenzies! -Hamadryad PS: Imagining Howl's face at Sophie's assumption of his sister walking in on him had me cackling with laughter. Sophie strikes again, indeed!
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Reviewed By: dudekiller [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 03:35 CST Comment/Review: i really liked this fic. good job.
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Reviewed By: SailorV-Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2006 01:42 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: LOVELY story. ^_^ The lemon didn't go at too fast a pace and it was written flawlessly,in my opinion. I liked how well you kept Howl and Sophie in character,even though I haven't read the book. I have only seen the movie,and even then,I could tell they were the same characters! Keeping a character IC is always hard for me,but you did it beautifully. :D You've made me want to read the book. :P Nice work! I hope to read more from you! This is one of the best HMC stories,if I do say so myself.
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Reviewed By: BBAnimeAngel91 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 19:40 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: kyaaaaa! it twas so ca-uuuute! that's the best howl's moving castle fic ever!! the characters r really in character and everything sounds as though Diana Jones wrote it herself it's so perfect! i hope u write more!! lots more! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Gittelbug [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2006 23:55 CST Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: Although i've only seen the movie i really enjoyed this fic. Everything was so realistic and seemed to fit the charaters well. Now i must read the book!
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Reviewed By: kagsessdaughter Silver [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2005 12:04 CST Comment/Review: this is a really good story and the first howls moving castle story i've ever read but heres a little help howl's little apprentice isnt named michale his name is markl okay i just had to get that out of my system cause i was geting confused
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Reviewed By: animegyrl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 15:22 CDT Comment/Review: *bows* you are the best!!!!!!!! >< hee. I hope you write some more fanfics!!
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Reviewed By: animegyrl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2005 16:39 CDT Comment/Review: WRITE MORE DAMMIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!>
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Reviewed By: Lady Goddess Ceres [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2005 11:54 CDT Comment/Review: I enjoyed reading your sweet, romantic story! I also appreciate the explanatory notes on the poem, etc. You've done well with keeping the characters genuine. Job well done, and keep it up! ^_^
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Reviewed By: bored cheese chihuahua On: September 05, 2005 21:50 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Whee! Update soon, kay? B.C.C.
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Title: P.S. Reviewed By: Lady Goddess Ceres [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2005 17:38 CDT Comment/Review: Sorry, I forgot to mention one of the main reasons why I reviewed your work. You have captured Howl's personality perfectly! I've often wondered how such a selfish, cowardly person could become one of my favorite characters in fiction. I think Sophie has improved him a bit in his faults, don't you? ^_~
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