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Reviewed By: God Of Death's Little Angel On: March 10, 2003 14:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwwwwwwwww sad! I hope he isn't dead. I wonder what will happen with Vegeta and the rest. hmm Anyways great job! This was wonderful! hehe Later yo, Icy |
Reviewed By: Chibi Halo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2003 20:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story when I found it on FF.Net and I love this story just as much now that I've found it again here on MediaMiner. You do great wirk and the story is very imaginative and original. Keep up the great work. |
Reviewed By: Krazy Kat On: January 30, 2003 12:46 CST
Comment/Review:
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!! You so need to update!! I'm dying over here!! What HAPPENS!!!???!!! X_X
misskatty01@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: Shaka On: November 30, 2002 18:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story!!! A very orignal idea, which is always good in story writing and a hell of alot better than all those damn Vegeta/Bulma fics that seem to be all over the place. Can't wait for the next chap. Keep it coming. |
Reviewed By: shadypony On: November 12, 2002 09:04 CST
Comment/Review:
oh very good. Me want more. I usually don't read crossovers cause they get confusing and everyone is OOC, but you did a great job. Your story didn't have any of those problems. You realy managed to keep everyone in character. This is the first crossover I have been able to read past the first page. I love it and hope you write more.
\\V//
^_^. Love and Peace |
Reviewed By: Havoc On: October 11, 2002 14:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, I rated spelling/grammar as a 9 because you mispelled 'nagi,' which for some reason, bugs me.
I really enjoyed this, but I deducted one point out of ten for only one reason:
You made Vegeta far too weak.
Think about it : Before he turned super saiyajin, he had already lived down energy blasts the size of trucks and blows that could shatter mountains.
Now here he is, actually getting penetrated by a laser beam or whatever the hell they shoot with. Here Nagi was faster at pulling a gun than he was at impaling her through the stomach with a well placed punch.
Hell, in your dream sequence, he's having a tough time beating Ryoko.
She's strong, yes, but nowhere nearly as strong as Vegeta. Also, she's sure as hell no faster than a normal person in good shape. That isn't superspeed, that's short range teleportation she keeps using, and her energy blasts/energy sword are nothing compared to Vegeta's.
(Yes, I'm aware that he doesn't get that 'till the Buu saga and this is pe-android.)
I hope I didn't sound like I was nitpicking at the continuity of DBZ, because that's so inconsistant, that would be a lost cause.
No, what I really wanted to illustrate is that you really did weaken him a lot during this story.
Other than that, I'm thoroughly enjoying it, everyone seems to be properly in character, and your writing is actually legible. Also, your plot is very original and I think this fic is very good.
...Just make Vegeta somewhere around how strong he really is.
I mean, he originally came to destroy Earth, and he did almost succeed. Let's not forget about Galik Gun, either.
Keep up the l33t work.
-Havoc |
Reviewed By: ryodo On: October 05, 2002 00:48 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just really love this fic its a real insparation to me.thank you.i really cant wait for the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: Marina Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2002 08:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ayeka had Trunks, right! So is Ryoko going to have Goten?!?!? That'd be so cool!!PLEASE tell!!*puppy dog eyes* |
Reviewed By: Shadow On: September 21, 2002 14:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is such a great fic, keep em coming! I can't wait for the next chapter. And what's gonna happen to Washu and Ryoko next? |
Reviewed By: yamisama [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2002 23:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one great fic.
Hope it will go on.
Keep up the good work. |
Reviewed By: Krazy Kat On: August 09, 2002 15:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
What HAPPENED!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!! Please CONTINUE?!?!?!?!?*runs around screaming like a maniac* |
Reviewed By: Icy Flame On: August 05, 2002 17:53 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this was really great! I can't wait to see what Vegeta does next! This is getting more and more exciting with each chapter! This story is very interesting and rather creative if I might say. You did a wonderful job at combining both cast in an alternate universe! I wanna know what Yosho did to Ayeka though, like did he brainwash her or something? Eh anyways I can't wait for the next part! Please update soon! Your story really kicks ass! later yo |
Reviewed By: M. Blade On: July 26, 2002 19:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Fun. Enjoable. Original. Awesome plot. SweeeeeT! You are a great author. long time for chapters to come out though -_-v Keep up the good work, though.
You could be famous someday! |
Reviewed By: AngleAyeka On: July 26, 2002 07:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was sweet of vegeta to think about her and their baby but I think he's wrong.I think he should stay w/ her and they could raise the kid together and Ayeka would be just as happy as if she was in royalty...Keep it updated. :) |
Reviewed By: Icy Flame [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2002 15:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ahhhh how sad! I can't wait to find out what happens next! Vegeta just can't give up like that!! I mean they have to end up together, they make such a cute couple! lol Anyways you are very talented, can't wait to see the next part! PWEASE UPDATE SOON! Later |
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