Title: Meh...
Reviewed By: Spirit Bagel of Death [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 08:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was interesting, and the writing was alright, but there are a few things I think you need to work on. For one, all the a/ns are a distraction, and really obstruct the flow of the story. Also, your plotting leaves much to be desired. The whole ' it was a dream' cop out is old and rather shallow. If you really want to write a raunchy sex scene, ( which was good, btw) then at least create a backround that makes sense.
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