| "Forgive or Forget" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: Forgive Or Forget
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2005 21:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: Hentai....What Else?
Reviewed By: Amethyst Secret On: August 09, 2005 23:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Two words: rushed and raunchy, which is really not a good combination. All too often, hentai works are often just an excuse to write out an explicit sex scene without focusing on the plot, and you have also fallen victim to this problem. Work on the story, not the sex scenes.
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Title: Run!!
Reviewed By: M On: August 05, 2005 17:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bleh! Try again, dialogue was boring, story was awkward.
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