| "Pools of Tao" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Gopu On: November 04, 2003 20:38 CST
Comment/Review:
It's great, please continue.
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Reviewed By: Ang, Andrew A. On: March 08, 2002 23:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing is amaturish and hurried when compared to Fred Herriot's (whose ideas you've obviously *ahem* appropriated, Brother Darklight is proof enough). Your grammar and spelling is so-so, the originality, creativity and enjoyment factors are good, but could be improved if you just pay more attention to details. To quote Micheal Crichton (I think so anyway), "God is in the details." |
Reviewed By: Zoan On: February 22, 2002 00:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Make your fanfics longer |
Reviewed By: C. Rose On: February 07, 2002 20:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the idea of this story, but a bit of back round information would have helped. This could also be so much better than it is.
There are a lot of first time writer mistakes in this that gave me a headache, I'm surprised that they were even included in the first place.
Author comments in the middle of the story are not needed and ruin the flow of the story, the prologe is a classic example of this. There are four sections to this story, if the whole thing would have been released as a prologe my rattings would have been higher than they are.
There are books out there like 'How to write Science Fiction' and such that are dry to read, boring, and full of a wealth of knowlede that would improve this story at 1000 percent. Good luck on this and I hope this helps you a little in the future. |
Reviewed By: Aaron On: February 06, 2002 01:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hurry write more!!!!!!! _NOW_ !! |
